And so it was one day that I strolled along my life
And found a beautiful flower in my path.
“Hello,” I said to the Rose that stood before my future.
“How I would most like to place you in a vase and bring you along with me.”
“But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. “Pay notice to my stem that is full of thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued.
But what I saw were not thorns, merely unique characteristics of her person. “None the less” said I “I would be more than honored to hold and care for you to help you notice that every petal you hold is another reason why I would love to hold you more.”
And so it was another day that I strolled along my life
Holding a rose inside a vase.
The rose was blooming larger than ever and the thorns all disappeared.
She was an immaculate rose more beautiful than any other.
But now losing her is what I feared.
Anyone could give her light and water.
It would be impossible for another not to love her as I do.
And so it is on this day that I realize I am lucky
For being the chosen one to care
And say or do the things I do.
It is all for you, my rose.
And found a beautiful flower in my path.
“Hello,” I said to the Rose that stood before my future.
“How I would most like to place you in a vase and bring you along with me.”
“But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. “Pay notice to my stem that is full of thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued.
But what I saw were not thorns, merely unique characteristics of her person. “None the less” said I “I would be more than honored to hold and care for you to help you notice that every petal you hold is another reason why I would love to hold you more.”
And so it was another day that I strolled along my life
Holding a rose inside a vase.
The rose was blooming larger than ever and the thorns all disappeared.
She was an immaculate rose more beautiful than any other.
But now losing her is what I feared.
Anyone could give her light and water.
It would be impossible for another not to love her as I do.
And so it is on this day that I realize I am lucky
For being the chosen one to care
And say or do the things I do.
It is all for you, my rose.
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“And So I Met A Rose”
“And so it was one day that I strolled along my life
And found a beautiful flower in my path.”
This beautiful line allows me to reflect on the loveliness of a flower, particularly a single rose, the effects it may have on a person. I pictured that rose sitting on that path, and I imagined a man strolling along that path only to encounter the unavoidable rose. However, I’m guessing that the poet doesn’t literally mean he stumbled upon a rose, as in the flower, but he found a beautiful rose as he was traveling the road of life. I believe that the poet thinks this woman is as lovely as a rose, in the sense that she is beautiful, fragile and delicate, and it seems as though he’s in love with this “rose”.
The tones of this poem are loving, caring, and appreciative. For example, the line, “And so it is on this day that I realize I am lucky, for being the chosen one to care” proves this. The line conveys that the poet feels he is lucky for caring about his rose; the poet admires her deeply. In the line, “It would be impossible for another not to love her as I do”, the poet conveys that no other person would love the rose as he could.
“But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. “Pay notice to my stem that is full of
thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued.
These lines are an example of a metaphor. As the poet is symbolizing the rose for a woman, I believe that the stems she refers to are only characteristics of that woman. As the thorns on a rose may physically hurt a person as they touch it, some characteristics of the woman may hurt the man emotionally, and the rose, or woman does not want to do this. Also, when the rose states, “But why? I am but a weed,” she is saying that perhaps she is not good enough for the man. Weeds are inferior to flowers, as flowers are much more beautiful than weeds; the rose feels she is but a weed, inferior to all others.
More or less, I did enjoy reading this poem. I admired the way that the poet used a rose to symbolize his loved one, I thought that was quite sweet. However, I felt the poem was a bit bland, it did not interest me at certain points; the way it was written and the subject of love in the poems are beginning to be overused. Also, the layout of the poem seemed as if it the poet was attempting to tell a story. This was confusing at times. However, the overall poem made me contemplate about love and the beauty of nature.
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I hate you Donoso this was another one of those “Awww! How sweet!” poems that you love to write, that make me gag. It was a great poem it was just so gushy and cute, ugh! Don’t worry I can’t completely bash this poem because it is really great. I loved the metaphor used throughout the poem. My favorite line in the poem was “And so it is on this day that I realize I am lucky For being the chosen one to care And say or do the things I do. It is all for you, my rose.” I was happy to see that at least one man on this earth realizes he is lucky to be with the woman he loves and is willing to admit it. you better treat that girl with care because she is special.
The tone of this poem is loving. You obviously love this “rose”. You see her flaws, her “thorns”, as wonderful characteristics of who she is. If you ask me, true love is just that; loving someone for everything they are, even the things that could be seen as horrible or disgusting. You cherish this woman with all your heart. There is no doubt that this poem bleeds love.
There is obviously some figurative language in this poem. The entire poem has a metaphor throughout it. “She was an immaculate rose more beautiful than any other.” The “rose” represents a girl you see as above all the rest. This girl is the most beautiful you have ever seen. ““But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose.” You used personification by giving the rose the ability to speak. Another metaphor you used in reference to the rose was saying that loving this girl and caring for her was like taking care of a plant. “Anyone could give her light and water. It would be impossible for another not to love her as I do.” Her flaws are the thorns and her good attributes are the petals. “But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. ““Pay notice to my stem that is full of thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued.” I love the metaphors and it’s probably the thing that saved this poem for me.
I like this poem even though it’s mushy and sweet. It’s very descriptive and it’s good quality writing. The metaphor and language of the poem is great. I know exactly how much you love her and care about her because you express it with every word.
I agree with Bibi when she said “I admired the way that the poet used a rose to symbolize his loved one, I thought that was quite sweet.” Like I said before this metaphor saved the poem because I really wasn’t feeling the “lovey-doveyness” of the poem.
And so I met a rose
"And so it was one day that I strolled along my life
And found a beautiful flower in my path." this first sentence is really interesting; it catches my interest because it says strolled along my life. That made me wonder what that meant; I think it means a normal day, your not really strolling somewhere but your moving down your life or the timeline that is your life.
The tone of this poem is romantic, kind of mellow/deep, very "cute" as my girlfriend put it. The reason for this brings me to my next subject, figurative language. In my opinion the entire poem is a metaphor, the rose represents a beautiful loved one. Another metaphor is the thorns on the flower, they represent the bad/strange habits that a loved one may have, you deal with those habits together and get around them which is why later in the story the rose has lost its thorns. I really like this poem, coming on the website and reading this was a pleasant surprise, I actually like this poem a lot. The metaphoric essence of the poem is amazing, what I mean by that is the whole thing is a metaphor and not only that but a beautiful metaphor at that. I really agree with bibi when she says that the poem is loving and caring and gives the example "And so it is on this day that I realize I am lucky, for being the chosen one to care" its a great line in the poem and it shows how much the author admires that rose.
The fifth stanza closes off with “It would be impossible for another not to love her as I do.” This line demonstrates the beauty probably both outer and especially inner of the woman portrayed in the poem. Since anyone will fall in love with her just as much as the author. The tone of the poem as usual is loving because of the love the writer feels and shows to the woman by the things he says or does. The writer also states that he wishes her for him in a metaphoric way by saying he wishes to put the Rose a vase and bring him with her, in other words to keep her to love. The end of the poem shows benevolence because the writer’s attitude is benevolent since he showed goodwill by caring for his Rose unselfishly and saying it was all for her showing selflessness.
The poem contains many metaphors. Obviously the author did not meet a rose and keep it in a vase. In a way the whole poem is a metaphor in which the rose stands for a lover. There is personification inside a metaphor, in which the rose says hello to the author. Roses don’t talk that is why it is personification, though it is also a metaphor because again, the rose is symbolic for a woman. I liked the poem and its way of making the whole thing one giant metaphor. It was a good comparison, especially with the lines about the thorns, which compare to as one takes care of a rose by removing the thorns to make it beautiful, just as one cares for a woman and she seems more and more beautiful each day. I agree with what bibi said about the poem having an appreciative tone, the part that the author realizes that he is lucky to have her show his appreciation as well as his benevolent attitude.
“The rose was blooming larger than ever and the thorns all disappeared.”
This poem is overall very different than your other poems but before I elaborate allow me on this auspicious of nights to remark upon the line up above. [Does that line sound like a certain rant from a certain movie? Hmm..] The line above was like the ending to the fairytale where the beautiful prince is an ugly frog and can only become himself (a man) again by being kissed by, don’t quote me on this, true love’s kiss. This line is expressing the affects that love and being loved can have on a person. I liked to believe that the thorns were the ways that the girl was maybe tough, cold-hearted, and unkind but with some love all was healed. Oh my gosh! I just have so much to say about this poem that I don’t think my thoughts are going to be coherent and I’m afraid all will not be written but I will try. It is just the thought are vigorously fast.
The tone of the poem is, without a doubt, light-hearted and sweet like the coconut, white chocolate bar sitting in my fridge (extremely sweet to say the least). I say this because the poem ends on a happy note where the poet is thankful to be chosen by the girl who can now, because of love, virtually capture any man’s heart (especially since the thorns are gone) but I think she had good reasons to stay with the man that tended her wounds(Wounds, maybe? Hmm..). I think she could see that other guys wouldn’t be as full heartedly affectionate as the man that loved her no matter what. (The other guys didn’t want to do the work. : [ Shame.) A good example of the light hearted tone can be seen when the poet said, “’None the less’ said I ‘I would be more than honored to hold and care for you to help you notice that every petal you hold is another reason why I would love to hold you more.’” The poet is being courteous to a rose but it is not just regular courteous words. Nope, it is like Renaissance/Pride and Prejudice courteousness and in a time like this you
flower in my path,” you could have easily been referring to a beautiful girl and when you say “rose” and “thorns” those can be simply said to be metaphors but when you get to the part of the poem where you say you carry your rose in a vase, that’s when I must intervene and say that the line I stated above contains a pun. One that caught me by surprised but was nonetheless caught.
I loved the poem. I found it to be very different then your other poems and I loved it. I truly loved that you personified a rose throughout the poem. It’s really what gave the poem its light-hearted tone that I really liked. Towards the end where you are carrying the rose in a vase, I imagine a little boy just strolling through a palace’s garden with a vase held closely to his chest. It made me smile… This poem hit me hard as many of your poems do and of course, as always, vexatiously at the perfect time. I always seem to read a poem that can somehow perfectly reflect my central thoughts at that current moment. Sometimes it is very irritating but it somehow, in the end, gives me more clarity so thank you for forcing us [the honors people] to do the honors comment every week.
I really don’t want to read another person comments but I suppose I must. I read Alex’s comment which I heard he got a ten out of ten on. Woot! Woot! Thing is. I don’t see his comment on here but I read and heard him talk about it on my bus. He mentioned that the poem reminded him of a cartoon where the sun, the moon, and the flowers talk to the main character. I have to agree that it is a bit on the cartoon side but I also believe you were able to capture the true message behind the fun which I have come to believe has something to do with how love can change people for the better and how sometimes when giving love to help others, the other can get so built up that they will leave because of ego which is cruel and selfish but does happen quite a bit.
I would like to comment on some of the other comments as well. Bibi and Holly both said that the love theme is getting old but I have to disagree. Love is timeless and you do a great job at portraying various situations that love can put you in and how it could play out. If Katilyn read this she would point and yell, “Brown Noser” but I could truly careless because, Ha Ha, I don’t let petty comments like that hinder my honest ways. I think most people are saying they don’t like the love theme anymore because they feel some sort of negative realization (or a realization in general) when they read it.
Basically, it is an aversion originating from something that was already residing within themselves, subconsciously, but somehow you have brought it into focus. I say this because at first I felt that way but I turned it around to help me instead of letting it get the best of me.
Sorry if this has mass amounts of grammar errors. I was writing too much in the heat of the moment and unfortunately I am at a loss of time.
The line “And so it was one day that I strolled along my life
and found a beautiful flower in my path.” Is the best line out of the poem because it is the first line and does a very good job at catching the readers’ attention because of how the poet says one day they were strolling along their life. In my head I can picture a path but not just an ordinary path but the path of life, another day going by and he “found a beautiful flower in his path” which didn’t literally pertain to a flower but a woman as beautiful as one. It is beautiful how life is compared to a path and I see how that can be done because when you take a step back life really is a path you travel and relating to the poem there are gardens in all directions which represent the people you meet but only certain special ones you stop upon reaching and admire such as the beautiful flower.
The tone in the poem is very romantic, caring and appreciative. The line “I would be more than honored to hold and care for you to help you notice that every petal you hold is another reason why I would love to hold you more.” Shows how the poet cares for the rose and to him it’s not a job to care for it but an honorable pleasure. The line “And so it is on this day that I realize I am lucky
for being the chosen one to care and say or do the things I do. It is all for you, my rose.” Shows that the pet appreciates how the rose stays with him and chooses him above the rest when others can do the same job he does of giving her light and water and he’s happy and appreciates that.
“But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. “Pay notice to my stem that is full of thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued. This line in the poem is a personification as well as a metaphor. The poet is giving life to the rose by giving it the ability to talk like a human. It is a metaphor because the rose is being compared to the woman and the thorns may symbolize a shield of protection that she may have towards those who may try to harm her. The line “Hello,” I said to the Rose that stood before my future.” Is a hyperbole because the rose was not literally standing before the poet’s future it was happening in the present time.
I enjoyed reading the poem because of how the poet personified the rose and told a beautiful love story they held with that rose who resembled a woman. I loved how the first line in the poem caught my attention and right off the start it told a wonderful story. This was a great poem one of the best that have been posted.
I agree with the comment left by addycted2syn when they say “You obviously love this “rose”. You see her flaws, her “thorns”, as wonderful characteristics of who she is. If you ask me, true love is just that; loving someone for everything they are, even the things that could be seen as horrible or disgusting. You cherish this woman with all your heart. There is no doubt that this poem bleeds love.” I think the same way as them because it is true that when you are truly in love you love the person for who they truly are. You learn to love their flaws and despite it all stick with them and cherish them with your all.
“And So I met A Rose”
“…“But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. “Pay notice to my stem that is full of thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued…”
This quote made me think of a something I once heard about a rose. It was that a rose beautiful and has a great aroma, but be careful how you touch it because the thorns around can hurt you. Just as a beautiful woman can hurt a man, she’s beautiful but can still break someone’s heart.
“…“But why? I am but a weed,” replied the Rose. “Pay notice to my stem that is full of thorns that could only hurt you,” she continued…”
In this same quote, the author clearly used personification because a rose cannot speak. The rose was a woman but she was just compared to the rose because a rose is pretty but also has it’s thorns.
“…She was an immaculate rose more beautiful than any other.
But now losing her is what I feared…”
In the poem, the tone is very romantic because the author is describing the person they are writing about as a rose, and because she is more beautiful than any other and the author is scared of losing her, which means he loves her.
This poem was another good one because it was simple and straight to the point even though it had a little mystery in it to stimulate my thought.
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I agree with “Bibi”, because I too admired the way that the poet used a rose to symbolize his loved one, I also found that the layout was confusing at times I thought it was going to be a story but at the end it turned into a narration.
I like this a lot. Honestly, not because it's great poetry but it's the description of love. I think any man when he falls in love feels something like this, no matter how "beautiful" she is in the eyes of others. In love, everything is beautiful. I am also a romantic.
I hate when people accuse me of being to young to love, I also understand that there's no such thing as being too young to be "heartbroken". People misunderstand love, like it's meant to happen, when it's not. We can't help who we fall in love with right? This poem applies the fact that there is love, and there is a fear of losing it. Those who are the most scared are the ones who love the most, and are the ones that are willing to give up the one they love, if that makes them happy.
I call a girl my rose, that's honestly why I like this poem so much. It's ironic.
-Major Briggs
what does this crap mean?
Nicole Martinez:
I Love it! by far my favorite!
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