Hooray, hooray!
The day has come
When all the dreams become real.
No more waiting to be seen;
Eye contact is normal now,
I have the right to gaze upon you,
As you do on me, if you do at all.
Today is the day, which I celebrate with you;
The making of a dream,
My victory over cowardice,
Thinking but never attempting to make an effort.
Sometimes it is the real that we dream,
What we would like to see or make happen.
They say that patience is a virtue,
But that time is of the essence,
And we should therefore seize the day, Carpe diem!
I didn’t let you slip away,
Because I wanted to keep holding on to an idea,
An innocent thought of us.
Well, mostly you, but I do recall that I was there
Holding your smile and your hand.
What shall it be on this grandeur day?
A walk through the fields of human existence,
A journey to a place where sitting is permitted?
Where I am allowed to capture your attention,
As you do with mine always when you’re near?
We can share the same air
And then we can label it “ours.”
Around the world we’ll stamp
Objects and moments of experience as “ours.”
Later years we can reminisce of what was done,
Or of what we did or are going to,
And in the end of this particular moment
We can make ourselves immortal,
Dancing and laughing,
Creating echoes for our ears
Setting precedence for young couples
Silly for each other as we are today;
Waiting to bask underneath the sun’s glorious rays;
I wanting to bask in only yours.
Steady as we go,
Make no mistake from now to then,
Or from here to there;
Every second counts in this spectacle of life.
True, there are many soul mates parading around
Looking for their better side,
But I am comfortable right now
In this dream I’m living.
I want to share some time with you,
Would love to stick around
And collect every wink, smile, or beautiful gesture
That flies from within your person.
I’m not promising forever,
Nor am I disregarding it either.
I just want to have a good time
And I think with you I could.
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mr.D i think this poem was great I like the way you keep me intersed throughout the whole poem. The reason I say that is because sometimes when your reading a long poem you might get bored and not be interested. But from the first line you got me hook on it. Good job, keep doing good poetry.
In the poem when it says, “We can share the same air/
And then we can label it ‘ours.’” I can feel the romance in your heart. It completely expresses how much this girl means to you and how much you are willing to give for her. You are sharing the air you breathe, your life. You cant live without breathing and you are willing to share that with someone. This person must mean a lot to you. “And then we can call it ‘ours’” not only are you willing to share it but you are willing to say it is as much hers as it is yours. These words make me think of love and devotion. They are some of the loveliest words I’ve ever read.
With every word in this composition the love for this girl is spoken. The tone of the poem, I think, is passion. With each and every phrase and stanza, I can see the intensity in your heart. Your feelings for the girl are very evident. When you write “Would love to stick around /And collect every wink, smile, or beautiful gesture /That flies from within your person.”, that isn’t something you say about just anyone. To want to not only experience things with someone, but remember them shows that they mean a lot to you.
I love this poem I think it is romantic and heartfelt. I love the expression and wording of each line. When I’m reading it I can almost see you saying with a smile on your face, that smile that people get when they really like someone. I also love that you use carpe diem because that is something that I strongly believe in. it is my life philosophy to live life to the fullest because tomorrow isn’t guaranteed.
When “the one said...” they usually can’t read long poems but this one kept them hooked I completely agreed. I hate reading super long poems because I get sick of them but you managed to make me like every line.
This piece of poetry was very well-written, and like the previous student comment stated, it holds my attention strongly. I am the type of person the lives in the moment, for the moment, and this poem portrayed just that. It is all about celebrating and being content with whatever speckle of joy life brings about. In this case, the writer is living in the moment of experiencing his first romance with someone new. The tone is somewhat child-like, due to the reality of the writer's excitement and glee. But this is a positive thing. Who would not be delighted to finally capture the heart of someone they think is worth it? One line that was outstanding to me was "I didn’t let you slip away, because I wanted to keep holding on to an idea, an innocent thought of us". This touched me. It is undoubtedly romantic, showing the willingness and fortitude of a love struck person to pursue the love of someone they view as nothing less than amazing. The writer finally lets his love know how deeply he feels, hence his cheer. A hyperbole that caught my attention was "...and in the end of this particular moment we can make ourselves immortal, dancing and laughing...". Nothing is as certain as death so obviously no one can make themselves immortal, unlike the author's softly sweet, yet bold, line. I enjoyed this poem truly. It was a pleasure reading it. Like I mentioned earlier, I also feel strongly about seizing the day. ♥
When it comes to the first stanza of First Date, I feel a sense of relation to the text almost immediately. As a matter of fact, I am sure that many can relate to the words found in it. This feeling of “cowardice,” the multitude of fears consuming men before they make their move, toward someone that they find interest of any sort in... I have no doubt that many feel this in one way or another, no matter how well they make their approach. Sooner or later, however, these fears must be overcome, and one must hold their 'victory' over them, a metaphor for finally mustering up the courage to speak to someone.
No more waiting to be seen;
Eye contact is normal now,
I have the right to gaze upon you,
When this victory is finally obtained, then these things no longer occur. You aren't waiting to be seen, hoping that your prey catches you in the same manner that a gazelle catches a cheetah. You can make eye contact with this person regularly, because you are in a close relationship with them. There's no awkwardness, no suspiciously quiet moments, no butterflies in anyone's stomachs; you possess the right to gaze upon her, now.
I didn't let you slip away,
Because I wanted to keep holding on to an idea,
An innocent thought of us.
Taking advantage of the moment, the minute, the single hour; or maybe even twenty-four hours. Carpe diem. A few days ago, a friend of mine told me that he'd rather regret something he did say than something he did not, and it appears to be showing that others share this opinion with these lines. Dreaming of the Real, using what was once just an idea, nonexistent, confined to the insides of your cerebral cortex and what have you not, and making the world your canvas as you project your desire onto what does exist. That is truly seizing the day.
Around the world we'll stamp
Objects and moments of experience of “ours.”
This short area of one of the stanzas speaks of the times and places that the author thinks of sharing with this person while together, sharing the same air. The poem's tone has an air of sincerity in affectionate feeling towards the person who the author is writing about. The author clearly shows in later lines how devoted he is to someone he loves.
I agree with addycted2syn and the one's comments. The piece caught my interest and kept it until the very end.
Mr.D I think that this poem is talking about a guy finding his one true love. That he wishes to be with her for the rest of his life. In the line We can share the same air
And then we can label it “ours.” It tells me how much you really care about this girl and how serious you are about loving her because that line was deep man. this poem is reflecting how one would feel when they think they have found their love that they wish they would be with for the rest of their lives. Several lines show that he wants to kiss her, hold her hand and never leave her side. The tone in the poem is a happy and romantic, for he is happy to love someone, and relieved that he does not have to keep searching for her. This poem is about truly seizing the day. Using that same line that I used earlier ‘We can share the same air
And then we can label it “ours” I think it is one of the vest metaphors I’ve ever read. To agree on what Kyle said you really sound devoted to the one you love in this poem. To conclude I think this is a great poem I’m going to print it out and read it to a friend of mines I know she will love it.
“Because I wanted to keep holding on to an idea,
An innocent thought of us.
Well, mostly you, but I do recall that I was there
Holding your smile and your hand.”
Here, you are using personification by giving her smile the ability to be held. I think this means that you were keeping the image of her smile in your mind.
“I’m not promising forever,
Nor am I disregarding it either.
I just want to have a good time
And I think with you I could.”
I like this line because it stays in touch with reality, while remaining in a dream-like love tone. You know that life doesn’t always take you where you want to go, but you want to enjoy your new-found love whether it’s for now or forever.
I like this poem because it captures the feeling of love perfectly throughout the entire poem. I can personally relate to the feelings expressed in this poem of the discovery of new love.
“Hooray, hooray!
The day has come
When all dreams become real.”
Like the one said the first time, I was also captured by these first few lines. I enjoyed these lines because one can immediately assume this poem is going to be cheerful. These types of poems make me feel more energetic than usual. While reading the poem, I found out that my assumption was correct. I did not find a single part of this poem that was depressing to me.
“Objects and experiences as “ours.”
In my opinion, this line describes how the guy in the poem wants to be able to go through different experiences with his loved one, so he can have someone to share his happiness with. I really liked this poem because I’ve see some relationships that aren’t successful because people don’t want to be open about their feelings, experiences, etc. with their boyfriend or girlfriend. I believe the guy in this poem wants to really commit to doing these things in his relationship, and that really pleases me.
When it comes to the last four lines of the poem, I have to agree with what Megan commented on. I’ve seen a few relationships other people have had. They say it’s going to last forever, and they try to enjoy their relationship for as long as they can. Unfortunately, there will be a day were some couples have to break up. In the poem, the guy is modest enough to be able to think about probable events in the future, but does not allow this to intimidate him.
I haven’t read many love poems in my life, so to be able to get me to like this is a great accomplishment. I particularly enjoyed how this poem made this type of love seem so simple to find.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It is together in a way that keeps my interested and keeps a beautiful flow going. I think almost everyone can relate to this poem at one point or another in their life and especially recently with the ever-prodding Valentine’s Day around the corner. You’ve captured perfectly the essence of the game of love into words. The chase of someone you think you might have a connection with and the unknown of what they might be thinking of you. I love the part where compare the two phrases “time is of the essence” and “patience is a virtue”. It made me think about the balance that is needed between the two and how well that comparison contrasted with the lines “Steady as we go, Make no mistake from now to then, Or from here to there”. You showed that tipping this balance can lead to dire results. Also, when I read “Steady as we go, Make no mistake from now to then, Or from here to there”, while I knew it applied to the path to happiness, seemed to fit with the chase as well and trying not to “screw up” or “say something stupid”. I liked how the poem conveyed a modest mood of hopefulness and was almost like a day-dream. To tell the truth, after reading lines like “The day has come, When all the dreams become real”, “My victory over cowardice”, and “And we should therefore seize the day, Carpe diem!” have forced me to think about my own confidence in this area and how significant it is. I agree with Kyle in what he said about how the poem has an air of sincerity and I think that this characteristic is one of many reasons why this poem is so approachable. Again, I really enjoyed this poem; I have never seen this kind of expression written down on paper that conveys the truth as well as you have.
I like the way that you emphasized your excitement that you had on that 1st and special date. With this line "The day has come when all the dreams become real", it explains the joy that you've been waiting to express when you’re finally alone with that one and special person. "Eye contact is normal now," says that now you guys will be able seek the true person that is within each other instead of taking a quick glance and walking away. These words also interpret that before you weren't able to take your time and have the pleasure that you wanted to grasp and the romantic vibe that occurs between you two.
The tone of this poem is affectionate and loving and maybe neutral. The reason why i say all of these is because the way that you wrote the poem made it seem like you were writing this for a friend or a loved one. For example, in this line "I didn’t let you slip away, because I wanted to keep holding on to an idea, An innocent thought of us", some people would've interpreted that you were expressing the friendship that you have for one and that you don't want any of that to go down the drain. Also with this line, it could've meant that you wanted something to remind you of what a wonderful and marvelous time that you had with that person so that in future you can reminisce on it.
I think that you've basically explained what others feel when they have true feelings for one person and are actually given the chance by them. These days’ people are quick to turn one down because of the way that they look. If you were one of those who were turned down for that or another reason and you've heard that they'll give you a chance, then your heart would've been screaming for joy. That entire person wanted to do is to “share some time with you" so that that person can prove to you what type of person they really are and what they are capable of.
“Around the world we’ll stamp
Objects and moments of experience as ours.”
From the beginning, this poem entranced me. However, my favorite part of the poem is when the author wrote what is above; when I read it I had to smile. How true it is! Although I’ve never been in a love relationship with any boy I have liked many. When I spend time with them, either in school or when we talk over the phone, there are certain things I call them “ours” because it is something we do frequently or something we did and it has a deep meaning to me. People around the world can relate to this poem and find themselves smiling or, if they are sentimental, have tears of joy rolling down their face.
The tone of this poem is affectionate, candid, and completely romantic. The following lines speak for themselves and portray the ardent love he feels for her: “I didn’t let you slip away/Because I wanted to keep holding on to an idea/Where I am allowed to capture your attention/As you do with mine always when you’re near?/But I am comfortable with you right now/In this dream I’m living/I just want to have a good time/And I think with you I could.”
The line, “And collect every wink, smile, or beautiful gesture,” is an example of assonance because the sound of the “i” is repeated throughout that line.
Without a doubt this poem is one of the best I have read since the author wrote the lines in a sweet and loving manner. I agree with what the past students have said especially with ell oh vee ee when the person asked, “Who would not be delighted to finally capture the heart of someone they think is worth it?”
"Hooray, hooray!
The day has come
When all the dreams become real."
This line shows the author's excitement of his first date. It seems he has been waiting for a long time for this moment, so he can't hold his excitement in.
The tone of this poem is enthusiastic. The author is extremely happy this day has come. As I said earlier, it seems he has been waiting for this day for a long time. This day is his first date. He wants to be with the one he loves on a date. The day has finally come, causing his enthusiasm.
"Dancing and laughing,
Creating echoes for our ears
This is a metaphor, because they are not creating actual echoes. It means they will be creating memories with the things they do on this date.
I agree with Megan Walker, when she says the poem stays in touch with reality while remaining in a love tone. He speaks realistically, so everyone can relate, but still expressing his love for that person.
I like the poem because it never gets boring. Most long poems I have to read, I skim through, but not with this one. It is a great poem.
“Around the world we’ll stamp
Objects and moments of experience as ‘ours.’”
In the lines above, I found that they reminded me of something I tend to do to past smells, places, tastes, sounds, etc; I stamp them. I put a label on certain sensory things that often were a part of a certain time. I love doing it because once it is stamped for a certain time and place, then from there on I can capture and forever hold the essence of that time. I think in this line you are stating something similar that you and your significant other (at the time) do to experiences that you share together.
The tone, in my opinion, is light-hearted. I think I have recently mentioned this tone but it really has been captured and is vivid in the poem, “Celebration of the First Date.” The very first lines shout playful and sweet. “Hooray, hooray! The day has come” Obviously happy and loving about your victory. Victory being that you asked her out and the two of you are living the “sweet” life. The poem continues with this tone down to the very last sentence where you state, “I just want to have a good time and I think with you I could.” From the poem, I believe that you were just living for the moment at the time, just taking it one day at a time hoping for the best.
“And collect every wink, smile, or beautiful gesture”
In the line above, I found a metaphor that stated a thought in a pretty neat way. This is the first time I have seen the word “collect” being used in such a way so, easily (as always), I was impressed. It is saying that her every move is worth seeing and that the poet/you would like to be around to see everyone which is very sweet.
Don’t care for long poems because they can lose me if they are just too metaphoric but, like Holly and others said, it was very captivating and an easy to follow poem. I liked it very much. I got to say, you don’t really write bad poems. They can be redundant but I think you work hard on them and get a good level of success. This particular poem was really cute. The last two stanzas show your feeling of content in the “now” (whenever the poem was written) which is such a great feeling to feel that just by reading the poem I grasped some of those good vibrations. It made my day a little less tense which is definitely something I can appreciate right now.
P.S. I combined the last two honors questions which I hope is not a problem. This is short but I’m trying something new and checking out what happens. :]
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