In My Haste
The morning’s ambassador from morn to night
Shines in her sky and my bed so bright.
The stars have all gone to cry their woes,
Because their presence no one knows,
Since while you walk and whilst you breathe,
The world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased.
I, so fortunate, and blessed by Him,
To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs,
To suckle and taste, and suckle more
From this fountain or more a river poor
Like rain from heaven, love you shower
So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower.
And could I ever repay you for your gifts?
Honesty and love I offer in my every kiss,
With lips, or palms, or limbs they touch,
Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust,
But I hear-by swear under your sister the moon,
True love is what I offer you too soon,
But better now than never at all,
Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone.
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In My Haste
“So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower,” is one of my favorite lines in this poem because it’s a great analogy which describes the yearning for her touch and a flower’s yearning for water. My liking for these analogies is increasing exponentially each and every week.
The tone of this poem could be considered loving or appreciative. The love the author has for this woman must be very strong if he is comparing her to a goddess like in the line that says, “To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs.” He makes it very apparent that he is grateful for finding such an amazing person when he says he feels blessed by God. Overall, this person is extremely happy in this woman’s presence and feels he is blessed to have found his love.
“To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs,” is considered a metaphor. In actuality, this woman is not a goddess, but he’s implying that she has the same great characteristics of one. “Like rain from heaven, love you shower; So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower,” is considered a simile because the poet is comparing his yearning for this woman’s touch to the flower’s yearning for water. Both, “Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust,” and, “Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone,” are personifications because in actuality, you’re heart can never talk or go anywhere. The poet is simply implying that he’s telling her the truth when he says he loves her and that they need to enjoy their love before it is no longer possible.
I definitely liked this poem. I found that it was more peaceful to read because it was finally about a good love situation again. It also has a nice message at the end. The message is that people need to love the people they care about because once they leave, internally or externally, love is no longer an option; enjoy it while you can.
I am the first in commenting this assignment and therefore there is no possible way for me to comment someone else’s comment. However, I think my fellow students will really enjoy this poem because it gives off such a great vibe.
In My Haste
"And could i ever repay you for your gifts? Honesty and love i offer in every kiss". This line illustrates the tone of the poem which is a gracious and appreciative tone. The author has a strong love for this female, and he cannot find a way to pay her back but to offer her true love in return. Another line that illustrated the tone is when the author said, "So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower". The author is saying he is so gracious of the love like a thirsty dry flower.
I have pointed out a couple of figurative language in this poem. First of all the poem carries a rhyme scheme throughout its entirety. "So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower", this line sows a simile in which the author is comparing his graciousness to a dry thirsty flower in need of water. "But I hear-by swear under your sister the moon", this line shows personification because from what I know, no one is related to the moon. "To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs", shows a metaphor because his lady is not an ancient goddess, her attributes compare her to being as good as one. Theres is plenty of figurative language in this poem, these are a few i had to point out.
This poem makes me think about someone that has been in love previously and has been hurt by it or left ii and he has came across a better love. A love that he really appreciates and wants to offer the same. It also reminds me of a time when I thought I was in love and it all came crashing down but a couple months down the road I met that someone who made me really gracious of being loved and in love.
I like the poem mainly because it is in rhyme scheme, and I love poems in rhyme scheme. The other reasons I really admire "In My Haste", is the use of figurative language the author uses, he gently illustrated how gracious the individual is by comparing him to a dry thirsty flower. The use of figurative language really beefs this poem up to be a very excellent one.
I agree with what "anonymous" has to say because this poem really does explain a good love situation and at the end it shows a really sincere message at the end when the guy tells his love what he will pay her back with for giving him the extreme love. This poem would really make someone who appreciates love more than they already do. Nice peace of work Mr. Donoso, once again Kudos to you!!
Sarto Joli
Block 2
"In My Haste"
"Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust"
I think that this line expresses the non-sexual bond two can share. The author needs no lust because conversations he shares with her or just the loving feeling he gets from being around this woman is better than sex. So I believe the tone is worshiping and yet unsure. Because the author put he on a pedastoolthe whole poem for example, in the last stanza he compared her to the sun which his earth revolves around by saying i swear to your sister the moon. He is unsure because he doesn't know when to give his heart up to her for example last stanza,True love is what I offer you too soon,
But better now than never at all,
Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone. That line showed the guy is confused about what his worth is to her."To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs" This line is a hyperbole of the worship the author gives this woman. Because i have never seen a regular dude pull a goddess.(my game ain't even that tight) So to the author to even be accepted in her presence must be astounding but to wake up and see this beautiful face, and to receive such loving warmth must be unbelievable.I liked the poem mainly because of the message it brings. It shows how to know when you are really in love. That the person is you love should be your sun, a god and that you appreciate them so much you cant remember what life was like before they came into your life, and that you'll do almost anything to please them. I agreed with both Sarto and Anonymous both basically said that the poem was somewhat a repayment to this women and that it was a way to express your appreciation too.
$.$tevens
11-08-07
I would like to start off saying that I really enjoyed this poem. I think the thing that makes me like it more and more would have to be the tone. I think the tone is very thankful and loving. I think the tone is thankful because the author is very thankful to wake up to a beautiful face. I also think that the tone in this poem is loving because by reading the first couple of lines you can tell that the author is in love with this woman. For example when the author says, “Since while you walk and whilst you breathe, the world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased” I think he means that when people look at her they should be pleased. Also in that line you can tell how grateful this man is for this women.
I really noticed some figurative language in this poem too. For example when you said, “ But better now than never at all, or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone. That line would be considered personification because in real life we all know that a heart can go anywhere, but I also really liked the choice of words for that line also.
I really like anonymous comment because I felt that ready this poem he/she felt the same way I did. Also I thought her comment was well thought out and supportive of her reasons for liking the poem or not.
In my haste
“To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs” this line shows me that the author is comparing his love one to a goddess which he loves very much. Also “So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower” tell me that he want to be with her as much as a flower need water to survive. Some figurative language I picked up was “The morning’s ambassador from morn to night” which is personification because the sun can’t be an ambassador and “But I hear-by swear under your sister the moon” the moon can’t be a sister. The tone of this poem is appreciative as stated in the line “And could I ever repay you for your gifts?”
All in all I think this was a great poem talking about how the author is grateful for having the person he loves beside him. I agree with the 1st anonymous that it’s a peaceful poem to read because it was finally about a good love situation and that it has a nice message at the end.
"In my Haste"
"Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust" I think this line is about how you don't want her because of her body but because of her personality and the connection you and her share. I think the tone of this poem is thankful. A line that shows this is "I, so fortunate, and blessed by Him,
To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs." Some figurative language in this poem is "Since while you walk and whilst you breathe,
The world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased." This shows how much she amazes you, but of course the world can't just stop turning because of one woman. I like this poem because it shows not all guys just want sex. I agree with Shawn when he posted "That the person is you love should be your sun, a god and that you appreciate them so much you cant remember what life was like before they came into your life, and that you'll do almost anything to please them."
>Greg C
In My Haste Talar Dulaney
11/09/2007
Period 2nd
This poem I thought was very cute, I enjoyed reading it. The line I enjoyed the most was “Since while you walk and whilst you breathe, The world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased” I enjoyed this line because it made me feel that the poet is so locked into her love that he feels her beauty and charm makes the world stop and have all eyes on her. I also liked this line because the author was calling this woman beautiful without using the actually word and I thought it was pretty cool to use different words instead of being vague he elaborated on how wonderful her beauty is , and how its so noticeable that the whole world has to stop and say way she’s beautiful. The line I also liked was “But better now than never at all,
Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone.” I loved this lined because it proves that if you want something in life go out and get it because maybe when your ready for what ever it is it’s probably going to be taken, like in this case if the author waits too long to capture this woman’s heart than maybe somebody else will come and catch her heart.
In this poem I’ve noticed a few similes like “Like rain from heaven, love you shower
so gracious upon me like a thirsty flower.” This is comparing or can be comparing how the woman loves this poet so much that she’s always hanging onto him in which the woman can be flower and the poet can be the rain where they need each other’s love to live. "And could I ever repay you for your gifts? Honesty and love I offer in every kiss". This line illustrates the tone of the poem which is calm and in love. And how this author has such strong feelings for this woman that probably not even his life can repay her for the gifts she gave. “But I hear-by swear under your sister the moon", this shows personification because I don’t think anyone has a sister for a moon unless they are a plant and I don’t think the poet is talking about a plant!?. "To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs" is a metaphor because you are comparing probably her beauty to a goddess and her skin tone to ivory which now that I break this line down I understand it more.
This poem made me think about a dog playing fetch whether he should bring the ball back or just run away with it. But in this case it seems like the author’s in love but doesn’t know if he should take advantage of it, or just run away with the love he has for her. Well I can’t really explain it, but I feel he’s kind of if if about whether he’s worth being with her.
I agree with Sarto, because I do feel this poem conclusion had a strong ending because this message doesn’t only go for love, it also can go towards people accomplishing dreams. I also agree with him when he said this poem would really make someone who appreciates love more than they already do, because it’s just a sweet cute poem. I also believe that this poem will make much more sense to a person in love. I agree with Greg when he says “I like this poem because it shows not all guys just want sex.” Because you’ve stated that your heart is nothing but for love and not lust and I thought that line was a STRONG message.
“The stars have all gone to cry their woes, Because their presence no one knows,” This line made me think of when the sun comes up in the sky in the morning and the stars are like they are cowering and go away over the horizon. The poem has a questioning tone. You wrote, “And could I ever repay you for your gifts? Honesty and love I offer in my every kiss”. It seems that you are asking for forgiveness for something you did. “I, so fortunate, and blessed by Him, To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs.” This line is a metaphor. The goddess is the woman you love, and the ivory limbs are the pure, white love that flows from her to you and the love is so visible that it is as tangible as limbs. I don’t really like the poem. The poem is really funky and trippy, like with almost every line having a hidden meaning, and I don’t really understand most of it. I agree with Sarto when he said the poem gives off a good vibe even though I’m not deep enough for the poem.
I like this poem because the poet is saying how he make a big mistake by choosing to offer his love too soon but it is better for him to say it before it is too late and will regret it later. The poet is remembering how his lover made him feel and what the poet is telling her about how he really feels about her. Not only that the word choices are excellent, not use complicated words to confused to reader but enough to allow them to create a picture in their mind. The lines “To suckle and taste, and suckle more
From this fountain or more a river poor
Like rain from heaven, love you shower
So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower.”
Is saying how her beauty is like water and rain and how much a flower needs water to survive, in this case it sounds like the poet really needs his lover to survive. The tone of this poem is happiness in a hasty fashion like the lines “True love is what I offer you too soon,
But better now than never at all,
Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone.”
Is saying how being hasty in “saying” how you love someone can be both happy and painful due to their reactions and what they will say. In these lines they are saying that the poet is happy to say that he loves her before it is too late to do so but at the same time he feels sad about it. I agree with Shawn J. about how the person that you love is your sun, and how much you appreciate them and how your life is was different before you met the person of your dreams and do almost anything to make them happy. Although the only thing that I don’t agree with Shawn J. is how you should base your life on this person alone since they can feel differently about you, like just being good friends rather than the boyfriend/girlfriend type relationship.
In My Haste
“I, so fortunate, and blessed by Him, to wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs”
This line shows how much the author really loves his woman because he calls her a goddess. The author is implying that his woman has is beautiful and has the qualities to make a man compare her to a goddess.
The tone of this poem is appreciative and compassion. The quote above shows the authors appreciation for his love because he is saying that he is fortunate to and blessed to wake beside a goddess. The figurative language in this poem is personification. When the author says “The stars have all gone to cry their woes” he is giving the stars the ability to cry which is a human trait.
I like this poem because it shows how much the author loves his woman. The author gives many examples of how much he appreciates his woman;” I, so fortunate, and blessed by Him” and “And could I ever repay you” for your gifts”? Are just two example of how fortunate and appreciative the author is.
I agree with Anonymous because this poem really does show how much the author loves and appreciates his love. This poem can help people to realize how luck they are to have found someone that they really love and appreciate.
I liked this poem. I could imagine this goddess the author was speaking about. A goddess with ivory limbs so is so wonderful and beautiful. The poem shows how the poet is very loving towards this goddess. That how he offers “love and honesty in every kiss.” Making the author’s tone loving and awestruck. How she is so amazing that how could he ever, “repay her gifts.” The line “the stars have gone to cry to their woes,” is showing personification. Since stars can’t be like people and cry. The line “Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust,” means that the author truly does love this person. It doesn’t mean that they care for the person because they may have strong attraction to them, which most people tend to confuse with love. Lust is just when you have a strong attraction to people like you want to just kiss them and do other things with them. You don’t care about the person individually but you know you just want them. Love is when you care for the person as a whole. You love everything about them including their flaws. It is sad how people tend to mix those up so easy and end up getting hurt or hurting someone in the end. Also I agree with anonymous “The message is that people need to love the people they care about because once they leave, internally or externally, love is no longer an option; enjoy it while you can.” Love is something that doesn’t last forever sometimes and you should enjoy it. If you find someone you love and that loves you back it is a gift. So many people in this lifetime search for such a gift and never find it. So if you are lucky to have such a gift you should treasure it. Whether you have the gift for a second or for 100 years it is something that will forever be priceless on this Earth.
This poem is about someone talking about how great the sun is, like by the line “To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs,” this line shows that he wakes up to the sun. The rays are like a goddess’ limbs. The sun though, can not have ivory limbs, which he is using figurative language, personification. I like this poem because I like being out in the rays of the sun, but also at the same time I love the darkness of night.
I agree with Anonymous when they said “The tone of this poem is appreciative as stated in the line “And could I ever repay you for your gifts?” The tone of this poem is very appreciative. He is offering her his love, his true love, and not lust. He even swears on her sister, the moon.
“In My Haste”
“Honesty and love I offer in my every kiss, With lips, or palms, or limbs they touch, Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust”, This is one of my favorite lines in the poem because the author is talking about how all of his actions and feelings are actually true and they are both physical and emotional and he isn’t the kind of guy looking for lust and he’s not using her. In the same line I think it expresses the tone of the poem too which is being honest and really loving the person and having them love you back also. The tone of the poem is also talking about how appreciative the author is of this woman that he cares about so much.
Like rain from heaven, love you shower so gracious upon me like a thirsty flower”, in this line it shows figurative language such as personification because in real life flowers can’t really be thirsty even though water is very essential in their growth. Another example of personification was when the author was talking about when stars cry and in real life stars can’t cry. In my opinion I really liked this poem because it’s talking about a relationship so real and honest. Many girls probably picked this as one of their favorite poems too because they know that they want the “perfect” relationship and hope for it too. Today in our world, many peple have lost their respect for their spouses and there are either love affairs or divorces, or other bad things that could happen in your relationship. I thought this poem made people realize how important honestly and being true to the person is.
I agree with Alyssa when she said that the poem had a nice message to it about people loving the person they care about and enjoying it because at any minute they could be gone. I think that is very true and it could happen to anyone. It has happened to me and some of the people around me and sometimes it’s hard to go through it but we all pull through it and we know what is best for us. I also agreed with her too when she said the poem had a good vibe because it wasn’t sad like the last poem and this poem talks about important qualities in relationships that well help it.
“In My Haste”
“I, so fortunate, and blessed by Him,
To wake beside this goddess’s ivory limbs”
This line is very enlightening, because the poet is expressing their sense of gratitude by stating that they are fortunate and blessed by God. The second line implies that this woman is as beautiful and majestic as a goddess, and she is as pale as ivory.
“And could I ever repay you for your gifts?”
This example in addition to the previous one makes it evident that the tone of this poem is grateful. The poet is comparing the reader’s affection to actual gifts and they doubt whether they can return that amount of love, because it is so bountiful.
“The morning’s ambassador from morn to night
Shines in her sky and my bed so bright.
The stars have all gone to cry their woes,
Because their presence no one knows,”
This is an extended metaphor, and although it is not obviously stated, it becomes obvious through analysis. The poet is comparing this woman to the sun. The sun is up from the morning to the night, shines and makes objects bright. Also, in addition to this metaphor, there is also personification included because the (other) stars are given the human like characteristic of jealousy. They are jealous of the sun because no one even notices them, because “she” is so bright in comparison to them.
“To suckle and taste, and suckle more
From this fountain or more a river poor
Like rain from heaven, love you shower
So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower.”
The first two lines metaphorically compare this woman to a fountain and a river, and how the poet likes to suckle on her, like you would suckle on water to get a drink.
The last two lines use similes to compare her love to a heavenly shower of rain, and how grateful he is for that love, like a thirsty flower would be grateful for rain, because it needs water to survive. The poet is basically saying he needs this love to stay alive.
“But I hear-by swear under your sister the moon…”
This is a minor metaphor, but it is an extension of the sun metaphor from earlier later on, two stanzas later. In Greek philosophy, Artemis is the moon goddess, and is the sister of Apollo (the sun god). This also ties in perfectly with calling her a goddess in the second stanza also.
I loved this poem very much, because the figurative language was easy to recognize, and I was able to provide a great deal of insight on the poem. Also, I love it because it was not too short, to where I couldn’t elaborate on it, and not too long to where I wouldn’t want to. I agree with Greg when he said that the poem makes it look like not all guys want is sex. Great job!
Title: In my haste
I like this poem; it has 2 things saying to me. The poem is saying, agreeing with Alan, that there are guys that want more than just sex which is a really powerful thing because now a day that’s all guys demonstrate. I like the following line “True love is what I offer you too soon, But better now than never at all, Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone.” because it shows that the poet wants her to let him love her and explaining to her that he has the butterflies in his stomach when he sees her, that he does in fact want to be with her. I also like this line “To suckle and taste, and suckle more From this fountain or more a river poor Like rain from heaven, love you shower So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower.”
In my opinion it seems as if the poet can’t get enough of her. He is stuck in a world of infatuation towards his lover. I agree with Alyssa’s statement about enjoying the moment you have with someone you really care about because just like that they can be gone so I think that this poem has a significant meaning that “You never know what you got till its gone” kind of thing going on and that’s what the poet is saying to his lover. All in all I really liked this poem it showed the passion and affection the poet had towards the girl and you easily see the infatuation running through his veins. PROPS DON.OSO lol =}
---In my Haste---
This truly Is a very thoguhful and sweet poem. It all flows and I love the rhyming J but there are many figurative language used in this poem one that I see the most is personification there are many of these. You can say that you use mostly personifications to get your idea across and to create a beautiful and poetic flow. Each line is beautiful by its self and each conveys its own message. This I think is a great skill for you to make every line of your poem vital to the understanding of it as a whole. These lines are personifications that I really liked “The stars have all gone to cry their woes,” stars can’t cry making this a personification. “The world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased.” This creates a picture in my mind as I see the world with a smile on its face showing joy. This whole poem I just beautiful to me I believe that the main thing that the main message you are trying to convey is that the love you have for the person you speak of is comparable to the galaxy and the earth. You talk about the stars the moon, the earth, heaven, and the sky. By doing this you show of how great the love is as it is as great as these things. You are fortunate to know that this woman has so much wonder and marvel that you feel honored to have her, and all you can do to repay her for being so wonderful is giving true love when you can both appreciate it. This is my interpretation of this poem and overall it was very good.
“The stars have all gone to cry their woes, Because their presence no one knows...”
An example of personification. In the poem, the stars are given the characteristics of those who seek attention from others, with their luminous combinations of ionized gas that can be seen from thousands of miles away. However, all of these stars pale in comparison to anything in their path that is brighter; say, the sun or maybe even someone that radiates beauty, such as the morning's “ambassador.” Because of this, they have gone; gone to “cry to their woes,” due to their presence not even being acknowledged at this point.
I agree with “Greg C.” on his analysis of the line “Speak how my heart is true and filled with none of lust.” Despite constant referring to the beauty of the person by the writer's side (“Since while you walk and while you breathe, the world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased,” hyperbole used to show just how beautiful this woman is to him, showing for him the world comes to a standstill in order to admire her), as well as affectionate contact, none of it seems to be out of a pure desire for sex. Only love in the non-sexual sense.
The tone of this poem is a peaceful one; the serenity of the early morning and the writer's use of it in order to compare to a woman's beauty blend together nicely. Later in the poem, towards the last few stanzas the tone changes to one of a slight unease; the writer is concerned that he has gone into a relationship too quickly, “True love is what I offer you too soon,” still mentioning that it is better than never having attempted it at all. However, I have read through the poem, and I will admit; I am not a fan of this one. I was going through the site and thought to myself, “I'll try and find whatever rhymes this time;” and stumbled across this. One line I found a bit odd was the last stanza, “Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone.” This can have a number of meanings, referring to a time when the two (woman and writer) are no longer living, or a time when they are not very loving any more, or a time when they have lost interest in each other. The meaning behind the line was somewhat unclear.
Krishni
Period 2
“In My Haste”
“The world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased.”
This line is extremely sweet. I believe it means that her presence and aura is so withdrawing and beautiful the world has to stop and look to see what force of god is causing such intensity. I also think you are saying that she is more captivating then the luminous stars. I also want to comment on the following line, “Or worse too late, when my heart and yours have gone.” This line has so much truth to it that I just want to take it and write it across the sky. I’m being quite dramatic but I believe it is your poem that has invoked the quality because this poem, in my opinion, is absolutely amazing. Back to the line, when things are in haste it can sometimes ruin it in the end but it would be much worse to have never have said a word. Life is so short that not having the confidence to say or do something can really affect your life. The line made me look back and look at all the events that have occurred because of my action that could be regrets but are not because it was more fulfilling then the few events where I chose to be consumed by fear. For example, this weekend I went to the carnival and chose to face a really big fear of mine, going a rollercoaster that goes in a circle and leaves you hanging upside down at the top multiple times. After I finally rode the ride I felt so great that I finally had the guts to do it even though I vowed to not go on it again because it just gave me a terrible head ache.
The tone of the poem is full of admiration and praise but when I read it I also hear the poem as an offer of themselves to someone, maybe seen as greater value then themselves. I get the feeling because of this line, “True love is what I offer you too soon, but better now than never at all, or worse too late” and this line, “And could I ever repay you for your gifts? Honesty and love I offer in my every kiss”. Really it is throughout the poem but mainly in those two.
In the poem I spotted great usage of figurative language. Like personification, metaphors, similes, and even a hyperbole. I believe in the line, “The stars have all gone to cry their woes” personification was used because stars cannot cry. An example of a metaphor and a hyperbole can be found in the line, “The world stops, and looks, and is extremely pleased.” Because I don’t think you meant literally the whole world stopped and looked. That would have been amazing to see but no I doubt it happened that way. ^_^ I think you were just adding some more icing to the cake of praise to this mystery woman. Anyways, I did spot a couple of similes. One being in the line, “Like rain from heaven, love you shower” which is a great line because it is vivid and lucid to the message you were trying to express.
I think this is my favorite poem by you yet. It rhymes a little and uses some really good figurative language. I like the title very much and how it is not until the end you figure out why it is called, “In My Haste”. It took me a minute to figure out who the “morning’s ambassador” was but when I did it made me smile. The topic behind the poem was excellent and now that I have read a bit of your poetry I have taken a liking to your style of writing. It is, in my opinion, not to difficult to understand and talks about certain truths about love and of the world.
Some one who is anonymous wrote, ““So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower,” is one of my favorite lines in this poem because it’s a great analogy which describes the yearning for her touch and a flower’s yearning for water. My liking for these analogies is increasing exponentially each and every week.” And I have to completely agree. I can’t find words to describe how much I liked the comparison. This person also said, “The message is that people need to love the people they care about because once they leave, internally or externally, love is no longer an option; enjoy it while you can.” which I have to agree with but also disagree with. I think her interpretation of your poem’s message is wrong, in a sense, that it really is not about people loving other before they leave but more about loving in a rush and the other person becoming claustrophobic but I think the person is right about how your poem does express that you should love before it is no longer an option.
This poem made me think a lot about how a world, when having someone to share it with, makes it so much better. The sun feels warmer, a pleasant warmth, and how every time you see the one you feel in love with you want to offer her your love in exchange for nothing but her love. Also, this poem made me think of that perfect timing when you say “I love you,” in the relationship. There is a perfect timing when you say it and the author said it to early but he doesn’t care because he’d had rather said it early then never say it at all.
"The morning’s ambassador from morn to night."
I loved this line. It immediatly grabbe dmy attention and made me want to read this poem. Th euse of the word ambassador really surprised me. I liked the way the line sounded and flowed. It made me think of the rising and setting of the sun and how beautifully the light shines on the world.
The tone of this poem is admiring. You are admiring God's great work in the form of this women. The sun makes her beauty shine bright as she lays next to you.
As usual you drenched your poem with figurative language. one example was "the stars have all gone to cry their woes." You personified the stars by giving them the ability to cry as if they have woes. You used a metaphor when you said "To suckle and taste, and suckle more From this fountain or more a river poor" and a simile when you said "Like rain from heaven, love you shower So gracious upon me like a thirsty flower." meaning that this goddess has love that you need and enjoy.
I loved this poem and was happy to see it didn't get to lovey dovey. Finally, thank you.
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