Sonnet #1
When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence
Never surrender or submit to fear
There are times when life is so very fun
There are moments when love is so surreal
Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone
And then peace and love will be all you feel
We, together, can turn dreams into truth
You and I can spread the word and believe
The world will be elevated, be couth
Soon the hearts of man will all be relieved
Love and be loved, then give back to mankind
Obey your heart and listen to your mind.
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Mr. Donoso I feel that out of all the excellent poems that you have written this has been the worst one. For me it had very little emotion, it was like a whole bunch of words put together, but I didn’t really find the sense to it. Not that I’m saying that it sucked because it didn’t it was a very good poem but I just felt like you could of done better because of the other poems you have written before. I just felt that you have put so much emotion and feeling to you other poems that when I read this one it was like “yeah so what”, that’s my criticism about this sonnet. I really felt that the lines
“There are times when life is so very fun
There are moments when love is so surreal”
are very true because I can really relate to them, I believe that that is very true because sometimes you are having so much fun in life that you forget what’s going on around you. Also that when you forget about what’s going on around you, it can sometimes mean that your love feels fake.
Title: Sonnet #1
Line: “There are times when life is so very fun; There are moments when love is so surreal; Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone; And then peace and love will be all you feel;”
What a way to add an assignment to a place where honor students feel somewhat non-pursued by the irritating homework assignments that are handed out at school. This poem, no sorry, sonnet, made me wonder what point you were trying to prove, Mr. Donoso. Were you speaking of someone daydreaming about their past and reminiscing about the happiness that was shared from person to person? I know for sure that it wasn’t a secret love because in the quatrain that I chose it said, “Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone”. So it must be an open love that everyone can see and appreciate? But what about this word “surreal”? Does it mean dreamlike, strange, bizarre, or fantastic? I wonder what kind of fun you’re talking about! I noticed that the tone seems sort of calm and excited at the same time. The sonnet kind of resembles a cool dude who is about to pop like a piece of bubble gum from the joy that he is experiencing. The word you used “surreal” sounded like it was a one or two syllables away from being a hyperbole! Good thing that this is a sonnet! However, I was sort of thrown of with the regime of your sonnet, or to the slow person, the way you wrote your sonnet. It’s not that I hate your sonnet or anything, but it’s a little bit too hippie for me! Not trying to be a critic, but this really doesn’t sound like Mr. Donoso to me. Maybe you weren’t really into this blog and was trying to give an example of a sonnet or just did it for the heck of it! Don’t hurt your self trying to explain yourself, it’s not a big deal. It’s just that if you’ve been around a person and kind of know how they react and respond to certain things, you begin to almost know who they are physically and mentally.
I have a few competitors who are trying to get ahead of me, but I do encourage them all to bring it on, baby! I’m still looking out for crazygirl, she should be around here somewhere. Even though I sometimes blog before her, I still look forward to reading one of her blogs. She can really get into it when she has the time. That really encourages me to post more better comments for the blog. I would have more to say in my comments to other blogs if I am really challenged, but I will back up anyone who says that this sonnet is one of those grateful for love kind of poems that makes one sit back in a rocking chair daydreaming about the way they “shared” their happiness.
P.S. who is this person!
-D_V_N Johnson
"When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence
Never surrender or submit to fear".
These lines to me are the best in the sonnet. They have a such meaning behind them, "never surrender or submit to fear". wow this is touching, and true. I agree with that line, because if you submit to your fear it makes you a coward, afraid.
Although this is a very well written poem and the first quad let has a lot of emotion, over all i feel that the poem was not so good. I didn’t think the message behind it about like living your life in it was not so great, yet my dislike for your poem may have something to do for my dislike of sonnets. I think that it would be much better if you stick to you're other work.
In this Sonnet a line of Figurative langue that stuck out at me was when you said "Obey your heart and listen to your mind, because you can't technically obey your heart because it is an organ and the would be kind of difficult to do.
Like D_v_N johnson said I think that this was also a clever way to imply how to write a sonnet, being your classes just had to complete one.
Even though i was not particularly found of this sonnet, I can say it as written well. Keep doing what your doing Mr.D !!!
Amanda p.2
Assignment #6
Sonnet #1
"There are times when life is so very fun,There are moments when love is so surreal"
I believe the lines above are trying to show that love is not always fun, that sometimes love is hard but it is good for you nonetheless. Inspirational and leading it is trying to show that you should try to show compassion for everyone you come in contact with,despite whether you like them or not."Obey your heart and listen to your mind." The figurative language above didn't make sense to me because my heart and my mind never agree because my mind always tells me to do the sensible while my heart the radical.The poem has a beautiful message behind it and I think that is what made me like it. Like everyone before I didn't enjoy the poem as much as your others,the poem lacked the emotion as Amanda said that you usually bring.
~$.$tevens
Title: Sonnet #1
Line: "There are times when life is so very fun
There are moments when love is so surreal
Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone
And then peace and love will be all you feel"
Mr. Donoso was that you who wrote that? Uh-uh I don’t think so. The poem was definitely NOT one of my favorites. It sounded like some hippie guy wrote it. The line that really made me think about was “There are times when life is so very fun, There are moments when love is so surreal, Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone, And then peace and love will be all you feel” because wow it just sounds really 70’s. I agree with the first comment you received. I seriously don’t know what you did, but none of the words had emotion put into them. It was written as a sonnet, you wrote well but I didn’t feel anything through it. Your tone of voice made me a little skeptic because you sounded happy and commanding simultaneously. I think that the poem is saying that love isn’t always easy.
In addition to that, the poet is saying that taking risks in love can be pleasant and can be hurtful, but there is always a happy ending for everyone somewhere along the line and you should always listen to your first instincts. 1. Don’t leave the one you love for the one you like. 2. You never know what you have until you lose it. Those two are very true in MOST cases. All in all, I believe this poem was not one of your best you shouldn’t write sonnet. No offense, leave it to Willie S. keep writing the other ones you do excellent on those.
--Stephanie C.
[props though for knowing how to write =P]
haha papita i beat you to commenting lol
haha papita i beat you to commenting lol
Title: Sonnet #1
“When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence
Never surrender or submit to fear”
These lines to me are the best in the sonnet because it tells you to never show or surrender to fear. If you surrender to fear you will many great things in life and you may only get one chance. Also you should show persistence so you can do your best you can do in anything like sports or school work. The figurative language I picked up was “Obey your heart and listen to your mind.” You can obey you heart and your mind at the same time because your heart could tell you one thing and you mind another. The tone of the sonnet seems to be calm. Also Mr. D I some what disappointed in the sonnet compared to you other poem and I thought you could do better if you spent the time. I agree with
D_V_N Johnson when he said you probably wrote this sonnet for the heck of it.
Sonnet 1
"When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence"
I think this means when you look at your life and what you want to do and where you want to go, you should also look at your 12-under years. You might see that you were doing, then what you are doing now, like drawing or other talents, or habits.
"When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence"
This quote makes me feel the tone of this sonnet is very calm and thoughtful. An example of figurative language is "Obey your heart and listen to your mind", this means to always follow what your heart says but take into consideration what your mind is telling you as well, I disagree with Shawn that the quote didn’t make since. I think it did make sense because obeying means to follow without question, while listening means just that, you can still disobey. This sonnet was on the fence for me, it was ok, but you have done better work. I agree with Shawn when he said "Your mind tells to do the sensible, while your heart tells you to do the radical.
Greg
Title: Sonnet #1
Line: “When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence
Never surrender or submit to fear”.
I feel that these lines hold the most meaning and power. While reading them I was overwhelmed with a sense of passion and encouragement given to the entire world. I have mixed emotions on the sonnet as a whole; to me some lines seemed out of place such as “There are times when life is so very fun”. This line seemed as if its soul purpose was tie up loose ends so that you could move on to the next section of the sonnet. The overall mood was of love and understanding. I agree with Stephanie when she said it was not your best work don’t get me wrong it was generally a good piece of work, I just felt that if there was more thought and time put into it then it would have been perfectly executed.
“Sonnet #1”
“When you ponder over your existence”
I believe that this poem has a deeper inner meaning, one that’s supposed to make you think of your life and what you have done with it. The writer was trying to get the reader to behave like a model citizen but not be afraid to take risk. I believe that these lines were written to make the reader put him or her self in the shoes of a 40 or 50-year-old person thinking of his or her life; like what he or she has done and where he or she has been or not been. They were written to make that person think of the highs and lows of their life, the mistakes they’ve made that they shouldn’t have done. The author’s tone in this poem is completely contemplative, as if he were trying to think of ways to get the reader to think about life, and how to be a better person inside. Lines like “Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone” and “Never surrender or submit to fear” make the reader believe that the writer is attempting at bettering the reader and motivating him or her. This poem didn’t have much figurative language but I did catch some personification in line 14 when it says, “ Obey your heart and listen to your mind.” Line 14 literally gives your heart the ability to speak and give advice; it also gives your mind the facility to talk and give commands. But the true meaning of this enigmatic line is that what ever you feel is right in your heart and mind after much pondering you should do because it is right and those two will never steer you wrong. Overall I once again didn’t like this poem because it was all over the place, for example first of all correct me if I’m wrong, but I thought that a sonnet was suppose to be about love, romance, longing, or of love lost. The theme of love was used sparingly in some lines. But I guest you could say that it sort of covered the theme of longing but that’s a heavy load of Bad B.S, and by B.S I mean “ Bad Stuff.” I agree with any one who sees the light and knows that Mr. Donso wrote this while simultaneously trying to watch Sunday night foot-ball, but to be more specific I agree with Stephanie C. when she said that “this was defiantly not one of my favorite poems.” Next time try not to watch TV as you write, you’re a good poet I’ve seen it before.
P.S your good but don’t quit you day job (a smile was here)
This sonnet seems to tell how people don't know about how they should live. Rather, they let other people to decide for them and choose to not be themselves. The lines "When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence
Never surrender or submit to fear"
tells how people are afraid of what other people think of them. The tone is to show how life can be better if you act without fear and share it with the person you love and care about. I don't agree with most of the people on how they say this poem isn't very good as your other work. To me, great poems come from the heart and soul of the poet rather than putting certain words and comparing someone to nature. However I agree with Dieumer about life having good moments and bad moments because not everything you do can make other people feel happy or sad.
Sonnet #1
This sonnet speaks about how to live a good life. This sonnet also speaks about how when people work together anything can be accomplished. When the sonnet says, “We, together, can turn dreams into truth,” it means that people can join together and finally reach all their dreams. This school year has been very hard for me; I decided to take some pretty hard courses. Even though this is my goal, I don’t know if I would have been able to make it this far without Karen by my side in every class and homework assignment. Whenever I feel like giving up, she’s always there telling me to keep going. Whenever I do not understand the topic, she helps me to understand as best as she can. Without her I don’t know if I would still be fighting to reach my main goal. Together we are surviving the hardest year of school we have ever had. “Obey your heart and listen to your mind,” means that throughout your life you should do what you feel is right. You are the only judge to living your life; nobody can do it for you. The tone of this poem is very optimistic. Throughout the poem, the author speaks of only the positive aspects of live and how to be sure you live a happy and successful life. I came to this conclusion especially when it says, “We, together, can turn dreams into truth; You and I can spread the word and believe.” Every word in this statement made me think that life really is good and that everything is possible; it’s a happy thought. “The world will be elevated,” is a metaphor found in this poem. We all know the world can’t really be elevated; this line simply means that the world will be a better place. Also, when the poem says, “Obey your heart and listen to your mind,” it is an example of two personifications. In actuality, your heart doesn’t give orders and your mind certainly doesn’t speak; the line means that you should follow for feelings and your thoughts. I like this poem a lot. The part about sharing your dreams and working together as a team was the best part for me for two reasons. It made me realize that working in teams can sometimes be easier, even if I don’t like them, because we can work together to accomplish great things. Also, it made me realize how fortunate I am to have such a great friend suffering along with me; each of us making each other better. It’s a great poem that anyone can relate to. I definitely disagree with Stephanie C. when she said, “this was defiantly not one of my favorite poems.” I think this is a great sonnet. After writing a sonnet myself, I realize how truly hard it is and I think your poem truly captures the point you wanted to get across meanwhile still following the sonnet rules. I love this sonnet!
Sonnet #1
"There are times when life is so very fun
There are moments when love is so surreal
Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone".
These three lines in the poem expressed the tone of the poem to me. The tone is a calm, motivational tone, Like when the author says "You and I can spread the word", and "Love and be loved, then give back to mankind". The author is inspiring the reader to open up and show love.
The poem made me think of a young person who is just entering the stages of a relationship and is being educated on how to love and express it. It makes me feel like if you straight forward and grateful when you show love, you will get the same type of love and affection back.
The figurative language i pointed out was "Obey your heart and listen to your mind.". Nobody's heart that i have yet to meet has the ability to yell out commands or give advice, the heart is a single organ inside your body that doesn't project orders maybe someone can listen to their mind for the most part.
I agree with what Stephanie said when she said that none of the words or lines had that much emotion put into it. The tone could've been a little more exciting.
I admire this poem but unfortunately it is not at the top of my list. Other poems that have been posted are not as vague as this one, they express a little more feeling. Don't get me wrong this poem is a very straight forward poem but I'm interested in the ones like, "In Our Mouths, Happiness" and "Cowards". I look forward to more great poems Mr. Donoso, Good Job!
--Sarto Joli
--Block 2
“Sonnet #1”
” When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years”
This line is here to remind you that your childhood is a very important part of your lifetime, so when you are having flashbacks, include those moments also. (The 90s were the best years of my life!!)
I believe that the tone of this poem is optimistic. “We, together, can turn dreams into truth You and I can spread the word and believe” This sounds like the author wants the reader (me) to collaborate with them and realize our dreams.
“The world will be elevated, be couth”
The author is stating that the world (society) with become enlightened and refined.
I like this poem because it ties in perfectly with our spakespearian sonnets that we had to do
recently. I even counted the lines, rhyme scheme, and even to see if it had ten syllables.
I agree when Stephanie C. said "It sounded like some hippie guy wrote it."
It does not sound like you at all, if this is even your poem.
The line: “There are moments when love is so surreal / Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone” really relates to me. It’s important to share all your love everyone because if u share love, they will give twice as much back. The mood of the poem seems very sorrowful. In the poem, its like you are telling your descendants that you had a bad time in life and if you don’t cherish every moment of it you’ll never true happiness. “Soon the hearts of man will all be relieved / Love and be loved, then give back to mankind.” In the last line you say to obey your heart and listen to your mind. This would be an example of personification. Your heart can’t give you orders, but you are saying that whatever your heart thinks will usually be the right thing to do. Also, another personification, listening to your mind is saying that you should always listen to what your mind says, but don’t always obey what you think you have to do. I like the poem. I’m not a big fan of sonnets; their rhythm and rhyme scheme seems a little unbalanced to me. But I like the theme of your poem, to love with all your heart. I agree with Dieumer St.Hilaire when he said “Next time try not to watch TV as you write, you’re a good poet I’ve seen it before.” This poem seemed kind of forced out just to have something to comment.
Ryan
I must say this sonnet did have a good point of mind but it didn’t really express emotions as much as poems in the past so I didn’t like it. I love poems with details and emotions showing through every line this sonnet was very vague. I agree on D_V_N on this one I think you wrote this poem for the heck of it. Or you may have been in a rush but this sonnet proofs that work rushed isn’t quality work, no offense. The past poems had so much more life in them and this one is dead and dreary. The line “We, together, can turn dreams into truth” is basically saying that only we can make our dreams come true. It is one thing to dream it, it is another to go out of your way and do things to make it come true. For example lets say my dream is to be a drummer in a rock band. In order to make this dream come true first I have to know how to plan drums well so I would need to practice a lot. Second I need to find a band to play in and once I have done those things I made my own dream come true. “The world will be elevated” is an example of figurative language. We don’t really mean the world will rise higher, but instead mean that the world will do better than it is doing right now. We will have a better world full of peace. The tone of this short yet simple sonnet was basically share the love and very encouraging. Like when the sonnet said, “Never surrender or submit to fear” and “We, together, can turn dreams into truth” are words you would hear from teachers or people that say you have the power to do anything in this world. We can do so much in this lifetime and could do anything it is just up to us to use the power to the extraordinary or just the ordinary.
Sonnet # 1
Mr. Donoso,
This poem made me think of a middle age man who is going to have more in life and also he looking back at his life, For some weird reason.
�When you ponder over your existence
Don�t forget to include your early years
It�s never too soon to show persistence�
I think this lines mean that we should appreciate our life and the fact that we are alive, and also we must also remember all our memories form our years back, because all of our memories is one beautiful gift, And we must keep on going.
�There are times when life is so very fun
There are moments when love is so surreal�
This quote means that at times life can be exciting and with emotions but then there comes a time when all that happiness comes to a end and you feel all left behind, it can happen In life many times when something good happens it goes down.
A figurative language in this sonnet can be �Obey your heart and listen to your mind.�
This mean that you have hear what your heart has to say, but at the same time you have to listen to what your mind says.
I kinda disagree with some people saying that your peom is not that as good as the other poems, all your poems have a meaning and are good, this one may not have made sense, but I understood it.
Keep up the good work Mr. Donoso!
JVdarkblade
Sonnet #1
�There are times when life is so very fun there are moments when love is so surreal don�t be selfish, but share with everyone.�
I think that the lines above means that, at times, life is fun and sometimes love just seems so hard, even though it may seem that way everyone should have a chance to be love in their life.
I think that this was a great sonnet that readers can relate to it. At some point in a persons� life they will know what it�s like to be loved and to love back. They may also go though tough times and back. I think that the message that this poem is giving to the readers is never give up on love, even though you might be going through bad times it will eventually get better and when it does you�ll be happy and relieved that you stuck in there through thick and thin.
I think that figurative language is used when the author says �Obey your heart and listen to your mind�. I don�t think that there is anyone in this world that has a heart that gives them commands and advice or a brain that talks to them.
I agree with D_v_N johnson when he said that this was also a clever way to imply how to write a sonnet, being your classes just had to complete one. I think that the author wanted his student to compare their sonnet to his to see how they are different so they can improve on theirs
Sonnet #1
“There are times when life is so very fun there are moments when love is so surreal don’t be selfish, but share with everyone.”
I think that the lines above means that, at times, life and love are great, and sometimes they are so great that they seem unreal. I think that this was a great sonnet that readers can relate to it. At some point in a persons’ life they will know what it’s like to be loved and to love back. They may also go through tough times and back. I think that the message that this poem is giving to the readers is never give up on love, even though you might be going through bad times it will eventually get better and when it does you’ll be happy and relieved that you stuck in there through thick and thin. The author is also saying that after you have found your happiness you should share it with others and help them to find happiness.
I think that figurative language is used when the author says “Obey your heart and listen to your mind”. I don’t think that there is anyone in that has a heart that gives them commands and advice or a brain that talks to them.
I agree with D_v_N johnson when he said that this was also a clever way to imply how to write a sonnet, being your classes just had to complete one. I think that the author wanted his student to compare their sonnet to his to see how they are different so they can improve on theirs.
“Sonnet #1”
When I read this poem it made me think about how you live your life and enjoy it even if you have some struggles.” There are times when life is so very fun there are moments when love is so surreal” This line talks about how life is very fun and how you should always remember and never take it for granted. I also think that this sonnet could be about working together could make things better and get things done. In the line,”We, together, can turn dreams into truth you and I can spread the word and believe”, I think it explains the tone of the poem. It shows that people are optimistic and don’t let things bring them down because throughout the sonnet you talk all about the positive things like love and working together. I also think that when you work with people you both help each other and you can guide each other through the way if your having struggles just like what Alyssa and I are going through. An example of figurative language is in the line “Obey your heart and listen to your mind”. It is a form of personification because in reality, you cant really obey your heart by telling it what to do and also in the line “The world will be elevated” you know that the world cant actually be elevated but it would be in a better and higher place. In my opinion, I like this sonnet but other works of yours have been better and actually had more detail but in this sonnet you actually got your point across straightforward without making it confusing. I agreed with Alyssa when she said that she liked the sonnet just like me. I do agree that writing the sonnet was pretty hard but I still managed to write a good one likes yours. You also followed all the sonnet rules which helped your poem. Good Job, Mr.Donoso!
"It’s never too soon to show persistence
Never surrender or submit to fear"
This line reminds me of how I "should" think. It reminded me of all the times that iv'e had things happen to me, and when i got back up, I pushed and the situation would always improve. If I would have given up on the other hand I would have been a quitter, and quitters don't get anywhere in life. The tone of this poem is to not be selfish, you need to share "love to be loved", as the author says. In the last line it I saw some personification when the author says "obey your heart and listen to your mind", this give your heart and mind the ability to give advice and orders. Of course your heart does not usually talk to you that is why this is personification. I liked this poem, it describes a better world, if only people would love. It is kind of like saying "love makes the world go round" because indeed it is when you love someone it will come back to you soon or in the long run. I've experienced that myself once when i helped a friend up when he fell, later that day I fell; and what do you know a complete stranger decided to help me up. I agree with D_V_N when he says this is one of those grateful for love poems. I look forward to these blogs because we all get to know how other people think, it's like you can get to know them without even talking... a wordless conversation. Seeing D_V_N's work kind of motivates me to do better than him, since he thinks this is a competition of this sort, although I do have to say he is a fierce competitor.
-Brandon B
P.S. I do not have microsoft word to spellcheck so forgive my mistakes (srry)(also i don't sleep if your wondering wh this is so late in the night)
“Sonnet #1”
This poem made me feel that life is not just about struggles, because it’s a time when to enjoy life and a time to have downfalls. This line “When you ponder over your existence Don’t forget to include your early years” made me think that never take life for granted because you only can live once, so never forget your younger years because they are important too. The lines “Never surrender or submit to fear there are times when life is so very fun There are moments when love is so surreal” set the tone because it’s saying stay positive ,don’t let anything get you down always be opened minded , and optimistic . An example of figurative language is personification when you say, “Obey your heart and listen to your mind”, because your heart really don’t speak to you and your heart doesn’t give you rules to obey. A line that I felt that had stood out to me was “We, together, can turn dreams into truth, You and I can spread the word and believe’ I like this line because the writer isn’t just thinking about himself he is thinking about others and that’s not being selfish. “Love and be loved, then give back to mankind” this line also stood out because its saying once you do something to others it will be done back to and why not continue to give back and receive. I agree with Karen when she says writing a sonnet is hard because it is and its nothing you can do in a few minutes you have to know the subject your writing about, you have to know the format for the sonnet and your poem has to make sense. I disagree with Sarto because “Cowards and In Our Mouth Happiness” was my least favorite but Sonnet #! Happens to be the best sonnet I’ve read. All in all I will look at things different be more opened minded and don’t take life for granted. I will also consider sharing and giving back. I will also think of this poem when I find myself deep in a hole, to never give up because everyone in their life time will have some type of down fall I will just have to remember stay positive and optimistic.
“When you ponder over your existence Don’t forget to include your early years” means to me that you are saying when ever we think about our lives, to not just think about what we’ve done now or a little bit of our past but all that’s happened to us since we were little. I like this poem because it does say that after thinking about our lives that we are to love, even through all we go through. That if we aren’t selfish and to share our experiences with others. ”Together” meaning not just him and someone else, but others such as friends to him, can help him experience love and peace instead of hare and pain.
I agree with what Shawn J said about the lines, "There are times when life is so very fun,There are moments when love is so surreal". Love does sometimes seem so real, but it isn’t and that life can have fun, enjoyable parts to it; yet, not always.
Comment on Assignment 6
“We, together, can turn dreams into truth”
To me this is my favorite line in the sonnet. Everyone wants to bring their dreams to reality, but no one can accomplish that alone. When two people come together for the same purpose anything is possible, and what’s the point of living if we don’t help one another.
The mood of the poem feels hopeful, that if we work together theirs hope for the future. For example in the sonnet you say, “Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone, and then peace and love will be all you feel.” That if we come together and share what we have, we shall finally have peace and love. This also applies to relationships, when we become stingy with what we have, our money, possessions, even ourselves the relationship will never reach it’s full potential, but when we commit ourselves 100% to the relationship, and give everything we have our lives, our money, our soul to that person, the relationship will have peace and love.
I like the poem a lot. It is very hard to write sonnets, and being able to express what you want to say while at the same time following the rules of a sonnet is a great accomplishment. I also liked the message in the poem, about not being selfish. I believe that we are blessed to be a blessing, and by my dreams coming true I want to be able to make other people’s dreams come true also.
One of the uses of figurative language in this poem was personification. You poem said, “Obey your heart and listen to your mind.” The mind may be a part of the human body, but it can’t talk. So this is a use of personification.
I agree with D_v_N johnson when he said, “I think that this was also a clever way to imply how to write a sonnet, being your classes just had to complete one.” You gave us a great example of how a sonnet should be written; it’s nice to know that my teacher isn’t assigning me something that he couldn’t even accomplish himself. So by putting this sonnet up you re-assured me of your talent as a poet, and showed me that you’re not a lazy teacher who just wants to get a laugh out of us attempting to write a sonnet. If you can write one though, I hope that I should be able to. Because if in the movies the student can surpass he teacher then why should I not at least dream to be better, and “We, together, can turn dreams into truth.”
“There are times when life is so very fun
There are moments when love is so surreal
Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone
And then peace and love will be all you feel”
This verse is very touching even though you did this sonnet half job.
I’m very disappointed.
But this verse speaks the truth, when saying life is very fun at times and when there are moments when love is surreal because your boyfriend is most likely lying when he says that he rather die than not be able to love you. Also when you say not to be selfish and share with everyone because there are going to be times that you need to “scratch others peoples back, to get your back scratched” as the quote is said.
And if you do/believe all of these things, all you will feel is peace and love.
Sonnet 1
Ahh this was an Ok poem considering that it was a sonnet lol
Actually it was not one of your best works Mr.Donoso but I think it was just meant for a model on how we should write our sonnets and I checked all the guidelines of a sonnet and yours’ qualify. It is in the form ababcdcdefefgg it has 14 line 10 syllables in each and 3 quatrains and 1 couplet nice job you followed all the rules. As for the poem now it was nice to read but it was only until the 7th line that I started to like this poem. It was sort of motivational as you said “Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone. And then peace and love will be all you feel”. I like these lines because it is true that when you share and really do something for someone you feel love and peace so this poem was a nice motivational piece. Keep it up :-)
I greatly enjoyed reading this poem, it was very inspirational and something I would recommend other teenagers too read since we are still at an early stage in our lives and sometimes need a little push.
The line “It’s never too soon to show persistence. Never surrender or submit to fear” is my favorite of the whole poem because I believe it is the best advice you can give too a person. Quitting is never an option no matter what obstacles should get in your way.
The tone of the poem sounds like its giving advice for the little struggles in life. It portrays a message that we can all memorize too keep us moving when times begin to get rough. “When you ponder over your existence, don’t forget to include your early years” meaning every moment in your life counts so your best effort should be put into each moment and everything you do.
The poem uses a hyperbole when it says” You and I can spread the word and believe, the world will be elevated, be couth.” The world will not literally be elevated it will remain the same in space as it always has been. In my understanding I believe this means that if we all contribute and turn dreams into reality the world will be a happier place and have a better elevated spirit.
I agree with the comment left by Karen below because it is true that you must always live your life and enjoy it even when the struggles arise. I also agree on how she says everything in your life counts and it shouldn’t be taken for granted. I believe we both have a close opinion on the meaning of this poem.
I think this sonnet is about the author reflecting on his life and how he feels, from his experience, how someone should live their life. Contrary to the first comment, I think this poem does show a lot of emotion. This poem makes me think of a man talking to his grandson, wanting to inspire him to be the best he can be. While many of the author’s poems are a huge release of emotions, this poem carries a more thoughtful vibe. The starting lines, “When you ponder over your existence don’t forget to include your early years”, reflects on a thoughtful tone.
I rather enjoyed this poem because it’s very wise and useful for life, as in the line, “Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone and the peace and love will be all you feel”. I like this line because I think it’s saying how when you make another person happy, or share your happiness with them, you’ll feel better about yourself. In the metaphorical line, “Obey your heart and listen to your mind”, I think it means to do what you want to do, such as a get a certain job or to date a person, but listen to reason.
This poem states what I think the world and everyone in it should be like. Such things as working together, never giving into fear, and turning dreams into truth is something that happens rarely in our everyday life. I believe that if everyone could follow just a line in this poem, our world would be grander, our lives superb, and most of all, our future spectacular. No more fighting, no more pain, and no more evil, a world in perfect harmony that would last forever. I believe this will only happen, however, if everyone in the world stops to think about them self. Only for a second or two. If they thought about everything they've done and how they got to their point in life, I think that our world could turn into this sonnet.
“There are moments when love is so surreal”
I had to comment on this line because it is has so much truth to it that it is ridiculous. The way this line affected me was that I felt like the poem was reading my mind. It made me recall the events of the past couple of weekends and how surreal it felt. They feel like days out of a book and have enough drama to be one. Just today I was wondering, how could I have let myself fallen for someone so easily; has god blessed me with such a perfect situation or is it too good to be true; has love blind sighted me; is it not love at all but just lust. How mysterious and surreal moments can be. I figured it’s definitely not love and that I am totally insane which is not a realization I haven’t seen before. Speaking of realizations, that leads me to my next paragraph about the tone of the poem. (Is that a double negative? If it is, just remember it sounded good. : )
I feel that the tone of the poem is like a man writing a sonnet of his most current realizations. Being very general and summarizing about it. I get that feeling because the poem is only fourteen lines long which is short compared to your other poems. I think the tone can be also, be seen as philosophical because it gives off didactic qualities like the ones a preacher would have. I especially feel it in the following lines,
“When you ponder over your existence
Don’t forget to include your early years
It’s never too soon to show persistence.”
Maybe even the tone a father would take with an inquiring son in these first three lines. I think overall the poem exerts confidence, strength, and power in a Gandhi like way.
The poem actually rhymes but I don’t think that counts as figurative language but the metaphor in the line, “Don’t be selfish, but share with everyone” does. In the line, I think you are saying to not keep your love for others to yourself but to give it to all. Instead of being cynical about people and the world, just give your love and hope for the best. There is a one use of personification I believe in the line, “Obey your heart and listen to your mind,” because heart doesn’t give order so it technically can’t be obeyed. But by writing that you were just saying that you should do what feels right and what will lead you to happiness. “Listen to your mind,” I interpreted it to mean that you don’t want people to totally disregard common sense and reasoning while obeying their hearts.
I thought the poem was pretty average. The fire I usually see and feel in your poems was devoid in Sonnet #1. Maybe if the sonnet had a stronger focus on one aspect and gave great detail, then I would have been fonder of it. If the poem was split into quotes, I would enjoy them all but together it just doesn’t flow in my mind. I especially enjoyed the first three lines, which were stated before, because it is inspiring to hear that it is never too young to show persistence or what you got to the world. The last line where it says to listen to your mind is kind of awkward for me because I grew up with the constant knowledge that the mind is not to be listened to because it doesn’t take into account consequences and just does things without a second thought. While the intelligence should be listened to because it is looking out for your well being and separates the pregnant teens from the academic scholars (or something like that). But I understand why the word was used and technically it really doesn’t mean that, it was just my perception of the meaning of the word that clouded the true meaning you were trying to depict.
Another person said, “The poem made me think of a young person who is just entering the stages of a relationship and is being educated on how to love and express it. It makes me feel like if you straight forward and grateful when you show love; you will get the same type of love and affection back.” I never thought of it that way but I must agree. The statement does though remind me of how I believed that this poem was written in a motivational, I-am-giving-advice tone because you’re not being negative in the poem but instead the message is very positive.
-Krishni-
It sucked =/
Seriously.
Maybe you should take some tips from Madonia.
Fabulous! This sonnet is like a molded version of what life should be wrapped up in fourteen lines. I think it's true that we should never be consumed by fear or give up. I think that we as people should always be wanting to exceed to the next stage in life, the next best thing. I think the tone in this sonnet is sincere and meaningful. If everyone in the world were to read this and take it literally, I think the world might be filled with better people that have better judgement. I want to disagree with Dieumer St.Hilaire. He said that it sounds like you wrote this sonnet while sitting on your couch watching sunday night football. He also said something about it not being your best. I know these are opinions of his but I happen to think differently. I feel like by you writing this, you're trying to teach a lesson to people. Also, it doesn't seem like you were watching T.V when you wrote this, to me it seems more like... kitchen counter and bar stool or... bedroom and computer chair. I picked out a line that I thought was a piece of figurative language. This line was the last one when you said,
"Obey your heart and listen to your mind."
Neither your heart or your mind can speak. Yes you have inner thoughts and gutt feelings, but it's not like your heart is knocking on your chest saying "Listen to me!" This is a hyperbole. It's a great, totaly awesome sonnet dude!
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