Ode to Lost Loves
I looked out my window
and saw you standing below a light.
You were looking up at me
with some smile of delight.
I turned around and went downstairs into the street,
But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me.
I looked up at my window
and saw you with a frown.
I guess I passed you up
when I was running down.
So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.
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This poem reminds me of how short relationships last at time. How you start dating someone for a week maybe even last a month. You’re both happy in the beginning and things are going fine. Then as quick as you were in the relationship is as quick as you guys break up. You don't see it coming at all and yet there it shows up. Like those unwanted relatives at thanksgiving that just pinch your cheeks and eat all your food. It sometimes hurts for break ups if you got close to the person. Then others your up on your feet the next day flirting a storm with some person. Also this poem reminds me of how some people come into and out of our lives without notice. While others leave their footprints in our hearts and we never forget them. People change just like day to night. We change little by little everyday. Sometimes it isn't about dueling on the past but moving towards the future. You shouldn't be sad it is over but happy it even happen regardless of how long it lasted. The good times are the ones that are planned, the best happen when you least expect them.
take my word for it, when you look for something, you never find it, its when you either give up or forget that you either come to a relization that you dont need it or it finds you, I found my first true love(beyond teenage, it was perfect in the best of ways)and when I went to find a better life-style she passed away behind where my eyes could see, I geuse what Im trying to say is stop looking and when it finds you hold on with a firm but gental grasp, its like soap, hold onto it, but dont squeez it or youll be glad your not in prison but regretful all the same.
This poem is just like deja-vu because this poem is descrbing an illusion of seeing someone in one place and going to that person and they end up in anonther place. To me if it was meant to be than it would of never ran away from you.
This poem is so right. To me its like a relationship, you dont see it for what it is while you're like caught up in the moment, but as soon as the haze fades and you're left standing there seeing something that was never true. Its like two diffrent people cauguht up in the moment untill someone takes action and changes and then you see it for what it was Deja-vu. Mr.d i wish i could write poems like you, that would be really cool, you should submit some of these to liek a book or something
Amanda
This poem is very short. I think that it is also too short for the emotions running through the person's mind as he is in his apartment. Not too many people have illusions like he is, and I think thaty he is another person living in denial. Most of Mr. Donoso's poems are rappped around love and misery, and are very sad and depressing.
I think this poem is about someone that has lost a family member, most likely a sibling or a parent. Sometimes, during the grief of death, the first stage is denial. It almost seems like the writer looked out his window and saw his loved one. Once he ran downstairs he realized that the deceased is truly a part of him forever.
i think that this poem is about a person who has lost someone they loved.The line" But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you."i think that he saw the person because he wanted to see it so much that he imagined it.i think that when he realized that it was an illusion he came back to his reality and realized that person was gone for ever. The only thing i didn't like about this poem is that it was a little bit too short i think that it had a lot of emotion and it ended too
fast and even thought it rapped around nicely, but again it wa to sudden.
Love feels like life itself, like a big gulp of fresh air in a spring morning, oh how wonderful the feeling and if love leaves, and the pain is enormous, maybe too much to bare, then it means that you opened your heart and loved with all your self.
Love should always be unconditional, and it hurts, but that is true love. It is a shame that we sometimes are too involved in finding that perfect match that we forget that we first need to be ready to love, and please let us forget about the what ifs, or the would it hurt... love, when is love it will hurt, for that reason when you find it, don't let it go and nourish it every day... then it will never go and it will never hurt.
el escriba
Ode to Lost Loves
This poem is really heartbreaking. Sitting there imagining seeing the one you love the most and out of nowhere there gone? Its really touching and reminds me of how some relationships are these days…. short and unpredictable. Life is short and you never really know what you have till’ u lose it. Odes to Lost Loves are one of those poems you can sit n read it for hours thinking of that special someone you’ve once lost. The 1 line that really got me was ; “So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu, But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.” This just shows how much the man loved the girl. He couldn’t forget her she was in his mind 24/7 and couldn’t believe she was gone. This poem is my favorite one you have written so far. I been through moments like these…even though people think teenagers are too young…we can relate to moments like these.
Ode to lost lover
So I slowly walked upstairs so ignore so deja-vu.
This line is the one that stands out to me the most in you're poem, it wraps the whole poem together by saying that the whole time you thought you were seeing this woman you loved it was really your imagination
The tone of this poem is depressing to me, the person in this poem to me seems like he was in love with the person he thought he was seeing.
In the passage the figurative langue is when you say i guessed i passed you when i was running down, it makes it seem that you were literally both running up and down the stairs.
I like this poem because it signifies something that was gone, like a love that withered away.
In stephines poem she said life is short and you never really know what you have till you lose it .I agree with this, its the story of most peoples lives.
Ode To Lost Lover
"So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu"
The line above is when you miss the oppurtunity to get the one you love passes by.The basic tone of the poem is a nostalgic tone as if you wanted to go back to the way things were with the lover.My favorite peice of figurative language was "But the only ones there was the night,the light,and me." This line really expresses how alone te character was.I liked the poem mainly because it was short sweet and to the point.I dont think i saw the poem the same way as anybody but i liked the way amanda's opinion in her comment by saying that everything was in your imagination.
~S.Stevens
Ode to Lost Loves
"I turned around and went downstairs into the street,
But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me."
I think this quote shows that you missed the love of your life so much, that you were seeing things. The tone of this poem is a lover pining for their other half. Evidence is of this is “But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.” Some figurative language that I liked was,“I looked out my window and saw you standing below a light.” Like you said the light symbolizes Hope, Happiness, and Joy. I agree with Stephanie, she said “But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.” This just shows how much the man loved the girl. He couldn’t forget her she was in his mind 24/7 and couldn’t believe she was gone.”
Ode to lost love
“So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.”
This is my favorite lines because it shows how much he loves that person enough so that the image is locked in his mind. Some figurative language I liked was “I looked out my window and saw you standing below a light” because this express how happy the person was to seen his lover. I liked this poem mainly because it was short but to the point. I agree with Stephanie that I was heartbreaking because at one moment you see you lover and the next their gone.
jimmy
“I turned around and went downstairs into the street,
But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me.”
I think that this line is using personification, because the poem began with you saying how you saw someone under a light, but now you are saying how you were alone on the street. The only “people” with you were the night and the light with out that actual individual.
”I looked up at my window and saw you with a frown.
I guess I passed you up when I was running down.”
I think that the poem is comical, and humorous, because the rhyme scheme is very basic like a nursery rhyme.
I like the poem, because it is very short and simple compared to earlier poems. Also, this poem did not use a lot of big words, but it did use personification and wordplay.
I completely agree with Jimmy when he said that this was short but to the point.
Ode to Lost Loves
��I looked out my window
and saw you standing below a light.
You were looking up at me
with some smile of delight��.
When I read this at first I was unsure of what this poem would be about. As I continued reading I realized that these were the perfect words to start such a poem .This reminds me of young love and how it starts so rapidly and everything seems well you see only what you want to. In my opinion the tone of this poem is sort of mysterious it kinds of makes the reader say who is this person who is seen. It makes you wonder and then at the end it leaves you with a sad feeling as the person in the poems feeling is kind of conveyed to you and you also feel that feeling of loss.
��But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me��. The figurative language used here is personification as the person in the poem personifies the night and the light and makes them to be people.
I actually liked this poem it was short and I could relate to it and also because it shows how things can start so fast and you can be so taken by someone but then things go wrong and you wonder how did this happen but little do you know that it was when you were in the thrill of everything when everything was happening so fast. I agree with Amanda also when she says that it was like the person in the poem was imaging all of these things. Good Job�� ya #1 Student Sheriece!
Dieumer St.hilaire`
Ode to lost love
“I turned around and went downstairs into the street,
but the only ones there were the night, the light, and me.”
I believe that the tone of this line is complete anguish with a deep longing for a love that can never be. I liked this poem because it was deep but short and to the point. I enjoyed the repletion there when you used the words “the night, the light, and me”
I liked this poem simply because the author quickly conveyed his feelings in less than seven sentences that obviously took some time to write.
On the other hand a wise man once said that, if one were to look out side of one’s window and see a more than ready smiling female standing underneath a light, one should not get involved with such a character because it is illegal in all 50 states. :)
“So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu”,
“But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.
Those lines tell that the person this poem is lonely and is having a deja-vu about whomever their missing not only that but the pain and sorrow they fill at this moment to be so alone. I guess the person was very close to whomever their missing and it hurt them to see that person gone. I’m saddened that there’s no figurative language in this poem. What I like most about the poem is when the person realized their having a deja-vu because it show acceptance.
“But when I reached my room it was only me still missing you”. This line of the poem really explains the whole things and how the person you are missing was just an illusion. I like the tone of this poem because I have once felt this way myself; you know the memory that will last forever and seeming like it happens over and over again. I like this poem because you can put so much feeling into such a small poem. I like Dieumer’s comment because it is pretty much exactly how I feel about his poem.
"I looked out my window
and saw you standing below a light"
This line sets the mood for the entire poem. It immediately sucked me from staring at a monitor to staring out of a window and seeing a female character standing below a streetlight. I think that this is the most important line, not the most meaningful line, but the most important because it gives us the setting. The tone of the poem is overall depressing, a lover that misses his loved one so much that he starts to visualize the one that he loved, to me that's just straight up depressing. It's even more depressing that this is a common thing, our poor heartbroken human race is constantly having hallucinations that their loved one is coming back to them.
Personally this is the best poem I have read of yours. Being an aspiring poet myself I can appreciate a poem that can put so much emotion into so few lines.I agree with what CrazyGurl :) said about how some people leave footprints on your heart. When someone walks over your heart, it takes some time for the imprints of their shoes to remove themselves from your
This poem reminds me of a yoyo relationship, in & out, in & out.
I think this because, the line where you said "So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu" or also it reminds me of the movie "The Break-Up" where the girl wants the guy to want to do what she wants, but instead the girl in the poem wants the guy to come outside, but just like the movie, when the guy does go do what the girl wants, she isn't there & no longer wants him. I think. In my opinion, out of all your poems I didn't like this one very much, because it was kinda hard to figure out what you were trying to say.
As with all people memories comes back anytime especially when we don't want it to. Other students said "This is like deja vu" but I think he is reminiscing about his lost love. The line
"But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you."
tells me he is stricken with grief and thought she was there to ease his pain. This whole poem seems like evanescence from happy to sad to vanishing. I like this poem because it explains so much in such a small amount of words and stanzas can show how someone feels when they are sad and misses someone they care about.
Ode to Lost Loves
I think this poem is about someone that has lost someone close to them, such as a family death. In the poem it says, “You were looking up at me with some smile of delight. I turned around and went downstairs into the street, but the only ones there were the night, the light, and me.” It almost seems like the writer looked out his window and saw his loved one. Once he ran downstairs he realized that the deceased loved one is truly a part of him forever. The tone of the author in this poem is deprived and sad. I can tell because of the last line that says, “But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.” I like this poem a lot because it talks about how people’s feelings towards death. It talks about how they will always miss the person but that deep down they will always be a part of them. Stephanie said, “Life is short and you never really know what you have till’ u lose it.” I feel this about the poem too because the narrator truly missed their lover and they probably never realized how important they were until it was too late.
So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.
I believe that the tone of this poem is depressing. You miss your love so much that your starting to imagine her standing outside your window and in your house. To me this line was the one that stood out most because after running down the stairs, slowly walking back up, and realizing that she was never there show how much you do really love her because you don’t just imagine people standing in your house window without a reason. I liked this poem because it was short and straight to the point, I also like this poem because even though it was short it caught and kept the readers attention throughout the hold poem.
I agree with Matt when he said the tone of the poem is overall depressing, a lover that misses his loved one so much that he starts to visualize the one that he loved. You must love someone that must to visualize her standing outside your window and in your house.
�I looked out my window and saw you standing below a light.� That is so sweet, I wonder whether you�re talking about someone who passed away who meant something to you, or a women you miss in your life. Your tone is kind of hurt and defiantly missing someone. I really like this poem it is very touching it reminds me of my great grandma who passed away recently. I disagree with Alan�s comment he thinks you are using personification I just think you are imagining and you want that person to be there.
-nico
"So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you."
The tone of this poem seems depressing. It's clear to see that it is someone that left a loved one or lost a loved one. I really like this poem because it shows how some people really feel after losing someone that they love or are in love with. The last two lines of the poem are the lines I was interested in most because it shows how much they were thinking about that person but then he realized it was just deja-vu. The figurative language I observed in this poem was assonance, the poem had rhyming lines that really made sense. I agree with the Jimmy and how he said the poem was short but to the point it shows depression.
--Sarto Joli, Block 2
“So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.” This line made me feel sad because the writer is still missing the love of his life. It made me think of a guy, who is so in love, he cannot stop thinking of that one girl. It warms my heart to know that true love really does exist. I would think the tone of this poem is more heart-breaking, as he misses that special someone so much he imagines her, downstairs, in his yard. The poem uses personification in order to make the writer believe his love is down in front his house, therefore the night and lights were personifying her. I did not like this poem because it was too bland. I mean sure it was to the point, but with added detail about the relationship the writer and his love, it would have had more feeling and emotion. - Brandon B 3rd block
Ode to Lost Loves
This poem made me think of how someone is always on your mind and how much you miss them and want to see them.
I think the tone of the poem was strong and lonely. It seemed that way because when you said when you went outside, you only saw the light and yourself and then you said you kept missing that person, it seemed like you were sad and wanted to see them.
“So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.”
When I read this line it stood out to me. Its explaining how your mind is already knowing that your going to see the person and how much you wanted to see them so you set that in my mind but when you reached your room it was only you missing that person and waiting to see them.
I liked this poem because even though it was short it still had a lot of meaning. There are people out there that miss some people a lot and want to see them badly.
I agree with Brandon when he said that the poem would have been better with details. It was a good poem but if you would elaborated more then the poem would have been more effective. Also you used personification when you were imagining the person there when they weren’t. Overall the poem was good.
Ode to lost love
“I looked out my window
and saw you standing below a light”
“I looked up at my window
and saw you with a frown.”
this two lines is what really sets the tone of the poem.
because in the beginging you think a person is down there but not really
and then you go down no one is there, but when you go back up you see them with a frown, this goes to show that the person was imagning.
its very sad and depressing on how you imagine you see the one you love only to see that the person is not there.
I think that the person has lost his loved one because it said
“So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you”
And that can get really depressing, it happens in life sometimes.
Title:Ode to Lost Loves
Line: turned around and went downstairs into the street. But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me.
There are high hopes in this poem, which I admire because I can compare to this poem I many ways. There aren’t always girls waiting for a dude to come up to her and start to flirt with her. I got lucky enough and found a subtle looking chick talking to her friends, and like always, I PUSHED myself into the conversation. The chatting went well and I scored an once-in-a-lifetime experience worth of hard-aches and pain trying to maintain our relationship. Even though the spark between us died and SHE dumped ME, for a reason I still don’t know, I still have thoughts about her and sometimes, I too, think that she is out in the street waiting for me. However, the way the poem is spoken sounds as if he is dreaming and in his dream he is running down stairs to meet her, sort of a simile. But on the other hand, I liked when crazygirl said, ”Others leave their footprints in our hearts and we never forget them.” I can relate to that saying because it was almost exactly what happened to me, as I explained earlier in my comment. This poem kind of makes me wonder what my brain thinks about when I sleep!
-Thomas Johnson
Wow...I can definitely relate to this poem. When sometimes you really like someone, not necessarily a love partner but a parent or a friend, and you lose them; it defiantly leaves that imprint on your heart. Sometimes you even catch yourself looking at something seeing that person. Just like this narrator. The tone seems like very depressing and lonely; like something's missing and he's trying to find it; but every time he seems to catch his on it its not really there.
"So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you."
He saw that person once but it was a mistake, so he went upstairs trying to ignore his "deja-vu" or in other words a mirage...but when he went upstairs to find the person again, they weren't there; it was only the feeling of him missing her. I can definitely agree with "crazygurl", she said some people come in and out of your life and you don't even remember them, but there are others where you pass by them and you'll never forget their face. Best poem I’ve read so far. =)
This poem to me is about how a relationship can be. As it say “I turned around and went downstairs into the street, but the only ones there were the night, the light and me,” that even through he ran to his love, he never got it. It was better off as they first were then where they ended up. After a relationship ends and you’re back where you were, (the room looking out the window) you might not be as happy as you were before. I like this poem because it makes me think of, while he is up in the window he and his love are probably like friends. Then when he went for her, it ruined it all, and she was where he was, now frowning. Back up in his room, his original state, he now misses her. This poem shows a guy’s sad point, missing his love. At the same time it’s serious on how truthful it is. Relationships aren’t just a game; you can’t undo what you have done. What’s done is done.
I like how “Crazygurl ;)” put it “Also this poem reminds me of how some people come into and out of our lives without notice. While others leave their footprints in our hearts and we never forget them,” that is very true. Watching out a window we’d see so many people, we know and don’t know. Yet some will leave a mark on us, maybe something small that what ever they did is just mentioned the next time you speak with you best of friends. Or it could be of something big that will last forever, and you will never forget.
i agree with jose on this one,the poem is depressing how imagine the whole thing in your head, seeing your love first on the street to then find her upsairs. but what interests me is when you see her out the window she was smiling and then when shes upstairs shes frowning.
Now Mr. Donoso, this is a much better poem to read then all the other ones. Good job. I actually think this poem is both affectionate and heart- breaking. I say this because in your poem it sounds like you are affectionate towards the women you loved but lost, and misses her very much. Your poem is showing that you think about her all the time and see illusions of her when she is not even there. This poem is also heart- breaking because it is showing that you really want to be with this woman, but you can�t for some reason. It is heart- breaking because in the poem you see her and I feel all you want to do is hold her or hug her and just be with her.
This poem made me think of a lot of times when I felt like the man in the room, looking out his window. I would be hoping that the one I loved was out there, waiting for me to notice her. And every time I ran outside she was always somewhere else. It was depressing at times and no matter how I felt, I would still run out there to try and catch her, only to be alone outside, with her always behind that window.
“I guess I passed you up, when I was running down” I read this line and wonder about. I believe it symbolizes all the times that the character in the poem had a chance to get back with, or get with the person that they love and then ended up blowing it. Its location in the poem hints this because it is right after the character misses a chance, supposedly, to be with their lover. It made me think of all the opportunities I have blown. I agree with one anonymous comment that said that the tone of the poem was affectionate yet heart-breaking. I believe this since you can see the affection the character shows for their loved one by hallucinating them. Then when the character realizes that it’s only an illusion you feel heartbroken. I noticed the same type of rhyme scheme in each stanza it was ABCBDE. Overall I liked the poem because it was short and simple, especially because of the short part.
This poem was tough to tag along to at first because I didn’t really grasp its entire meaning on the spot because it really requires some thought. The quote I found most compelling was this one;
“But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.”
This quote made me think of something that makes a person happy when in a needy time, like when someone is in a desert and the person is in need of some water and they start thinking they see a waterfall or some colossal source of water.
The tone of this poem is a deprived man who’s in desperate need of the woman he’s thinking of for example: “So I slowly walked upstairs to ignore some deja-vu,
But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.” The poem is written in first person narrative.
“But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me” is a clear use of personification since the author said the only ones he considered the light, or the night a person but I’m sure it was just the emphasis of nobody being there other than himself.
This story was another good one and I liked the fact that it was short, understandable, and stimulating at the same time.
I agree with Mickey because he found exactly what I found from reading this poem, the man in the story is hallucinating about that woman because he loves and cares about her. He loves her and thinks about her all the time but now she’s lost to him.
Title: Ode to Lost Loves
“I turned around and went downstairs into the street,
But the only ones there were the night, the light, and me.”
“Realreader008straightupg” mentioned that the narrator was hallucinating about a woman he loves. If the woman is alive, he is probably desperate to be with her, or he just broke up with someone he loves. If she is dead (like some people have mentioned) he probably misses her a lot. It’s sad to see how he can’t get over any of these problems. It seems to be affecting him so much that he is seeing her when she might not be there at all.
“But when I reached my room, it was only me still missing you.”
I don’t if I’m right, but I think that the narrator found out that he was just seeing things. He doesn’t just say that he saw the woman somewhere, and tried to run to her again. He admits for once that it was just him that was thinking about her because he misses her.
“I guess I passed you up
when I was running down.”
I believe these lines contain an example of figurative language. You can’t just pass by somebody who doesn’t really exist. What I think is going on is that the narrator wants to stay with that woman. He can’t be with her, so in his hallucination she just stays away from him.
In the beginning of the poem, I thought the tone was hopeful. When the narrator saw the woman in his hallucination, he was most likely in a good mood. He said that the woman had a “smile of delight.” He obviously became encouraged when he saw that, and ran downstairs to see her. Unfortunately, she was not there, and you can tell that the tone worsened. When he said “but the only ones there were the night, the light, and me” I felt the loneliness he was feeling at that point. In the line “saw you with a frown” one can immediately tell that the narrator’s mood wasn’t the best at that moment.
I really liked this poem. I’m not the best person when it comes to understanding poems (sorry). This poem was good for me because it was simple to read, understand, and interpret. Additionally, I was able to feel what the narrator was feeling in this poem. Running downstairs to see that there was nobody outside made me feel cold and lonely.
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